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Phantom Pantoum

Phantom Pantoum The fog moved in Stole the night Covered the world In a shroud of white. Stole the night On silent feet In a shroud of white His job complete. On silent feet The thief had crept His job complete As the whole world slept. The thief had crept Stole the night As the whole world slept In a shroud of white.

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Michael Tor

Date: 6/9/2020 9:43:00 PM

Susan you have mastered this difficult form. Love the imagery. Hugs Michael

Susan Jeavons
Date: 6/10/2020 8:29:00 AM

It is my only Pantoum, so I've not mastered it yet. Haha. Hugs Michael.

Panagiota Romios

Date: 7/11/2019 10:41:00 PM

Susanlove this one. Panagiota

Susan Jeavons
Date: 7/28/2019 1:13:00 PM

Thank you Panagiota. Blessings, Susan

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/4/2019 11:40:00 AM

I have tried this form and it is DIFFICULT to the INTH degree. You have made it seem do-able. I am not ready to try again, but I like the rhythm of it!

Susan Jeavons
Date: 7/4/2019 11:58:00 AM

It is a very difficult form; thus my only pantoum! Ha! Thanks again Caren. Hugs, Susan

P.S. Awtry

Date: 5/21/2019 12:07:00 AM

I haven't tried this form before. It works here very nicely. Gives your poem a suspenseful mood. :)

Susan Jeavons
Date: 5/21/2019 10:22:00 AM

Thank you P.S. It is not an easy one to accomplish. But I liked it. Blessings, Susan