Phantom Dreams

The tangled torrid scenes of twisted pregnant fiends among the muted yells where guilty conscience dwells...

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Laura Leiser

Date: 10/8/2023 2:15:00 PM

Ooooh, I like this, Craig! It’s spooky and mysterious! Love your imagery and imagination! :)

Maria Williams

Date: 10/8/2023 12:21:00 AM

Craig you're just amazing with these forms of poetry . You've really put a lot of study into it and it's paid off. Sigh, I can only wonder where you come up with these lines, but you're an incredible writer. A fave for me . Hugs

Craig Cornish
Date: 10/8/2023 4:44:00 AM

Thanks so much Maria but ironically I have to change this one because the rhymes must have more than one syllable per the judges requirements.

Tom Woody

Date: 10/7/2023 9:55:00 AM

Never liked pregnant fiends. Probably never will, especially the yelling sort ;)

Craig Cornish
Date: 10/7/2023 9:58:00 AM

LOL - yes, they have more - but I screwed up here - read below.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/7/2023 8:57:00 AM

I really love how you’ve written this, i would like to learn this form too, you’ve done yours seamlessly as always. My favorite is the second line! So deep!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/7/2023 7:03:00 PM

Oh wow . Polysyllabic rhymes sound interesting, i shall mail you , to learn this form, thank you so much for offering to help too. And the second line now has been changed? I am in awe of your knowledge and poetic skills!

Craig Cornish
Date: 10/7/2023 9:57:00 AM

Thanks Inky - actually, I screwed up, because the rhymes are supposed to be polysyllabic and what I wrote is single - back to the drawing board. Anytime you wish help with meter (though this contest doesn't require it - mail me) This particular form is often requires iambic hexameter which I will edit it to.