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On the Crest of a Wave

Trauma stained my innocence, before I knew that the sunless sky lost its glory to doomed darkness, an empathetic gaze which roamed beneath my saffron skin, an ungodly vulture disguised as a gracious guide, whilst waking up to wrinkled sheets of satin, which burnt and betrayed my virtue as an offspring- as virginal petals stained in blood, drenched me in cruel flashbacks. I swam against ghastly ghosts, searching for cosmic lilies, floating on the crest of a wave, through unholy rivers, baptizing darkest sins of my exploited mind. l've tasted sparkling saline streaming down tall murky falls, Every ripple graphically reminding me of my childhood tears, secrets which scarred my strained soul into suppression, allowing dark voices in my head to control every aspect of my conscience, questioning the stars that dimmed their silver on me. Was my fatigued smile a written consent to the bloodthirsty breezes, brutally invading every untouched cell? Did I blindly sing along to their lullaby? Or have I been cursed before I saw the first light of life? Perhaps these questions will forever haunt me, there's no right answer when the ugly truth has stolen every reason to place my trust in the unkind mind of the humankind, for the devil resides in their shameless shadows, singing hellish clarity.

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Date: 9/25/2023 8:29:00 PM
IE, this is simply phenomenal! Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 9/10/2023 6:56:00 AM
I felt the anguish in this one as I was reading. A touching tale of sorrow and resident evil. Nicely done! :)
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Date: 9/5/2023 12:21:00 PM
We don’t have the luxury of long explanations or lines of description. And yet, your poetic gifts leave a huge impact. Metaphorically you show us physical anguish wrapped in satin sheets. Soulful are the deep emotions. Acoustics are off the wall, your tempo, style and for a very "important cause". A voice for the silent and suffering, this should be awarded. You hit the reader fast and hard with the most evocative language. With that said, "Congratulations" on your win! I'm so very impressed~Anaya
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/10/2023 12:58:00 PM
Thank you for this profound comment truly you are a gem, you felt the depth of this and i cant express my gratitude enough. Appreciate you beautiful soul
Date: 9/3/2023 8:18:00 PM
Back here with a heartiest congratulations for your magnificent winning in the contest my dear Ink, this write truly deserved it, it's extremely poignant and profound..
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Date: 9/3/2023 5:31:00 PM
There are few things more heartbreaking than when a friend with whom you had shared, turns against you. Your poem holds truth and wisdom. It is profound and sincerely praise worthy. Congratulations from SV
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Date: 8/26/2023 10:05:00 PM
a lovely poem!
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Date: 8/26/2023 7:31:00 PM
What a traumatic experience through which you passed taking you to a drastic realization that venom lies behind every fang. Fictional or real, it is an unpalatable truth that guardian angels can sometimes turn monsters. After trusting someone, when betrayal comes, it is heart shattering ! Empress, you continue to be an empress in poetic prowess with your soul piercing images and amazing display of feelings. Even after reading this, the pain lingers !
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Date: 8/26/2023 9:20:00 AM
Oh gosh, my dearest Ink, this is an extremely heart-wrenching and painstaking piece that made me shed many tears.. Sigh, my fingers tremble as I type this because even to think about this is terrifying.. Your metaphors, imagery, alliteration and vivid poetical skills hued with colours and adjectives are so immaculately articulated. The emotions, definitely dark and just extract the soul out from the body. You're one of the topmost poetesses whom I adore, because your heart is truly precious..
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 11:32:00 AM
Im so sorry my angelic star, sigh, this should come with a trigger warning really. Thank you for feeling me n your heart is precious too, bless you
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/26/2023 9:22:00 AM
Abuse in any form is traumatic and you've depicted how one got betrayed by a person whom she considered to be a ray of her light, only proving to be the whole spectrum of darkness.. The guiding angel turned out to be a ravenous vulture.. I can't quote a single line because all of this has blown my mind away..
Date: 8/26/2023 7:32:00 AM
My friend, this is a masterpiece in my humble opinion. Every verse lends to its mounting powers. Such fantastic descriptive language and one can see the beating heart in it. So graphic, the reader thinks that it may have actually occurred. A true gem and a fav...God bless you.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/26/2023 7:57:00 AM
Thank you my friend. As mental health advocate you do noble work and God blesses you for it. God bless...
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:39:00 AM
Thank you so much, i am so grateful for your support and yes as a mental health advocate i can only be the voice for many that suffer in silence. And i wish this will stop … thank you so much ..
Date: 8/26/2023 6:11:00 AM
This poem is an extraordinary display of poetic brilliance, showcasing an abundance of exquisite verses and breathtaking imagery that is skillfully painted with words. You delve deep into the turmoil of the mind, grappling with the overwhelming task of finding meaning in the horror of abuse or heinous acts committed by someone they believed to be trustworthy. The metaphors employed throughout the poem add a layer of depth and complexity, enhancing the overall beauty and impact of the writing.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:38:00 AM
Wow you have an eye for details as a reader, you are not just a brilliant poet but also an eloquent reader that grasps the emotions within hazy metaphors, i am grateful for your support. As this was a difficult write
Date: 8/25/2023 9:48:00 PM
A familiar, horrific tale and yet, impossible as it sounds, the wounded soul can and must, rise like Phoenix, soaring to zenith heights, looking not backward in time.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:37:00 AM
Yes, true, and sometimes we can only be the voice to many that suffer in silence. Thank you so much truly for being supportive
Date: 8/25/2023 4:04:00 PM
A terrifying experience as a child or young person. It can so easily distort a person's view of life itself. You share the mental anguish, the struggle to make sense of abuse or ungodly acts by someone you feel the need to trust. If this is your personal experience, I pray that healing may come to you. Thanks for sharing a needed message with us Ink. Smiles and Hugs Bill
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:36:00 AM
It is every writer, poets, honor to receive feedback like yours, truly grateful that you understood my poem and felt it. As a mental health advocate, i can only let many brave souls know, they are not alone. Thank you again.
Date: 8/25/2023 10:35:00 AM
Oh boy, we've gone from wolves and vampires to vultures, ghastly ghosts and even Lucifer himself. These last two are angst ridden darkies, to be sure. I hope all is well with you. Looking forward to one of your love sonnets.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:34:00 AM
Amen to that, someday, …. Thank you for your uplifting thoughts I appreciate that. This was a difficult write
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/25/2023 4:52:00 PM
Not to in any way make light of the horrific theme you've tackled here. Some day terrible memories will no longer haunt people - Isaiah 65:17
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/25/2023 2:52:00 PM
Haha. You're the best!
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/25/2023 1:54:00 PM
Lol you are so funny. This was about child abuse. But as always a bit too metaphorical. Yes ill just did a love sonnet on instagram like last week i think. Will post soon some love cheesy poems lol

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