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Off the Wall

The painting jumped; it jumped at me. Surprised, I rose to view. The heart it beat; it’s gold, it’s red. I blink the wings that stretch. Pull down the sky; the moon outstretch: For angel’s mine to fetch. Subtle the head, did nod in fact. The faceless nice was pink. The halo sun, a whole-some note; Resounds the shining frame. The subtlety won’t fall for fame. A slight reflective flame. Pure white, the angel within view. See-through; the bluest sky. Off shoulders arc the pomp. Serenade of wild hues. Quickened in place; It’s quite a ruse. Silent of toodeloos.

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Date: 6/28/2024 6:35:00 AM
Love the rhythm, the beat, and images--kept me going.....nice one!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2024 8:43:00 AM
So glad! We have a couple paintings that inspire my writing! :) We poets can dream up anything and everything we see or imagine pops into view in our poetry. God bless!
Date: 6/27/2024 8:19:00 PM
Quite an out-of-frame-experience you've composed here, Mrs. Imaginative!! Huzzah! ~ Alice B. Toaklas
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2024 5:54:00 AM
Thank you, Gershon! :)
Date: 6/27/2024 5:16:00 PM
Dear Kim, there is so much to love about this expressive and impressive work of wonder. "The painting jumped; it jumped at me" - what a great opening line! Loved every playful line, the amazing imagery, wordplay, personification, effective rhymes and the clever title too. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 8:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Susan! I feel encouraged!
Date: 6/27/2024 12:28:00 PM
I can see you were inspired... this is what art can do to us.. us poets we write about what we see and what we feel...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 1:45:00 PM
We sure do! Love writing poetry! Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 6/27/2024 10:39:00 AM
Wow, this is very interesting- had me line for line, I loved how the painting seemed to have its own personality, despite about what was expected of it. Wonderful writing, Kim- <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 10:42:00 AM
So glad you liked this, Paige! Every day we can create! Blessings, dear one!
Date: 6/27/2024 8:38:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your fun/creative "off the wall" write. Maybe you need a vacation. Hahaha!!! Have a fun day writing away...............
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 9:57:00 AM
Yup…could use one of those! Those painting, that are in my sight day and night, want to come to life :) ;)
Date: 6/27/2024 6:41:00 AM
It certainly came to life --a life on its own--creating an effect -a live description...vivid imagination.....
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 10:01:00 AM
Thanks Patti! I appreciate!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 9:58:00 AM
Thanks Patti! I appreciate!

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