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Night Owl

=================== From the darkness of the eaves, bathed in evening's undertone, something's seen among the leaves - something made of meat and bone Bathed in evening's undertone, something tries to slow it's breath Something made of meat and bone, sensing sudden, silent death Something tries to slow it's breath Something's seen among the leaves, sensing sudden, silent death, from the darkness of the eaves =================== 04/22/2020 Prompt #1

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Eve Roper

Date: 5/9/2020 10:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Lycia , in the pantoum rhyme and personification contest. Great job with the theme you decided to choose. Thank you for your participating in the contest. Hugs Eve

John Watt

Date: 5/9/2020 6:25:00 PM

Lycia, nicely done on this win with your first pantoum. You built the sense of dread nicely. Congrats ~ John

Gary Radice

Date: 4/25/2020 1:57:00 PM

I really like this both in substance and particularly, the style. I like the way the 2nd line of each verse becomes the first line in the following verse. The repetition works well and adds to the atmosphere of the poem.

Lycia Harding
Date: 4/25/2020 7:42:00 PM

I agree, I really like this form and find that the progression really lends itself to the ominous. Thank you!

Wendy Watson

Date: 4/24/2020 4:12:00 PM

I can see why Brian chose this one, Lycia. What a sense of threatening suspense you created here. A really good read!

Lycia Harding
Date: 4/24/2020 9:03:00 PM

Thank you, Wendy! This was my first stab at the 'Pantoum' format. It was challenging but very fun to work with!