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Moonlight Edvard Munch

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some of those stones have dreams they watch every night thinking someone just like them paved a path to the moon it looks that way ~ so possible but long ago, they sunk into the sediment there's no movement there anchored unreassuringly to the sea bed yet still exposed that blanket of ocean is stolen from them each night but when they open their eyes their very best dream is unfolding with their memory short they are lulled once again by the ripples and moonlight and the endless possibilities of dreams once asleep, the night swallows the moon the trees sprout rungs for the night to climb down to eat away at the edges whilst the stones dream of journeys that account for their missing comrades because that isn't blood on the beach stones have been told they don't bleed a story whispered to them by their blanket the blanket that leaves them cold and exposed when they wake to a moonless night they'll just close their eyes and wait I don't know if they'll submerge into darkness beneath darkness because I just walked by with my own problems and never looked back

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Date: 7/20/2024 11:14:00 AM
Dear DD, as always your poem is exquisite! Extraordinary imagery, metaphor and personification. Especially striking was "because that isn't blood on the beach/stones have been told they don't bleed" and your last three lines are an intimate, soulful finale to an evocative/emotive piece. Congrats for your recognition in Ink's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 7/20/2024 2:27:00 PM
I love when that happens..
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/20/2024 2:09:00 PM
Thank you Susan, I loved writing this one - it was such a strange story that emerged from nowhere :) thank you for kind words x
Date: 7/12/2024 2:51:00 AM
This is absolutely gorgeous, although i dont usually like repetitive words, somehow your repetitions enhanced and delivered a very picturesque portrait. So dreamy and deep and soulful! The way youv paid attention to detail is what stood out the most for me here and the flow is seamless! My fave line “ I don't know if they'll submerge into darkness beneath darkness” wow! A line i wish i came up with! Congratulations on your win. Well deserved
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/12/2024 10:40:00 AM
Thank you for my placement, I very much enjoyed writing this one and getting lost in what Munch had painted - thank you for the detailed feedback x
Date: 11/26/2023 7:22:00 PM
nicely unfolded from start to finish - 'into darkness beneath darkness' - great line
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/1/2023 4:05:00 PM
Thanks Mat, I appreciate your support

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