Ivory Flakes

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For Ink Empress's Ivory Flake Contest

Ivory flakes fall down in place Of salted tears on somber face Took all my love and left me ice Wasn’t enough to make me cry You snatched my soul years ago With hot kisses that now are cold Was warm with charm and I miss it Alarms now warn you are narcissistic I made a mistake in trusting you Sadly I say I believed in you So snowman I walk away today You are cold and I refuse to stay

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/17/2025 12:20:00 PM

What a creative write you have here. Love your ending. Yes, walk away from the snowman. "Good Luck" Looks like we both did this one. Have a fun day as you write away..................

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/16/2025 8:03:00 PM

Nicely penned, Karen. G.L. in the contest. ~ gw

Karen Jones
Date: 1/16/2025 8:06:00 PM

Thanks Gershon!

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/16/2025 5:45:00 PM

There are many moving metaphors in your poetry dear Karen, and it makes me sad. When people behave horribly and destroy our hearts, we always discover a lot.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/16/2025 5:49:00 PM

Yes. We appreciate when we have a healthy relationship again more so. Thanks for reading!

Yann Rolland

Date: 1/16/2025 4:56:00 PM

we learn a lot when someone break your heart, we feel sad, your poem touched me, thanks

Karen Jones
Date: 1/16/2025 5:09:00 PM

Thanks for reading Yann!