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So I went and did it. I just mastered and now created a music video and published a song to enter into a "Battle of the AI Bands". 

I want to be your home to welcome you in, just so you know you will never again be so alone For though we are temporarily apart and for this time we work on righting our apple carts before the real mind meld dance card gets to start But I know where my heart is I know where my mind wanders and where my dreams do tread And it's with you I would rather be though you told me not to wait for you I know there is nothing, no one that replaces you I want you I need you I desire you in my soul It's rare to have a depth of feeling the knowing of a kindred soul someone you can unwind completely with relax and know it won't grow old I had no idea you existed and you are far more than I could expect Even had I made a list you exceeded every spec Our communication sizzles even in chat it's off the charts on cam it was hot, it would have set off fire alarms You are charming and talented intelligent and wise worldly and silly, vibrant and alive Even had I made a list you exceeded every spec Our communication sizzles even in chat it's off the charts on cam it was hot, it would have set off fire alarms You are charming and talented intelligent and wise worldly and silly, vibrant and alive You turn me on, so I wrote this song Your virtues I can extoll for days but I want to disrobe you too I want to make you mine and have you in turn, make me yours Whoaaa I want you I need you I desire you in my soul Dropping you a kiss in text . I had no idea it only took six hours to fall in love.... Dropping you a kiss in text . I had no idea it only, took six hours to fall in love. ohhh ...

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Date: 9/24/2024 11:08:00 PM
I enjoyed this Susan - keep writing. Maria
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Date: 8/15/2024 12:20:00 PM
Your poem beautifully captures the intensity and depth of romantic longing. The way you convey the desire to be someone’s "home" is both tender and powerful, evoking a sense of safety and connection that transcends physical distance. The repetition of phrases like "I want you, I need you, I desire you in my soul" adds a rhythmic intensity, mirroring the deep emotions you feel.
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Susan Manley
Date: 8/15/2024 2:05:00 PM
Thanks! its another of those storytelling poems that was a perfect lyric.

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