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I Spent a Day With You

I spent a day with you, gazing into your sad green eyes— I could see that you were placated with the thoughts of death—with being without— with being unheard. I am afraid of entering that void alone too— but we all must and will. But I sit near you and listen because I am alive and we are ever more alike. Maybe I am scared of the inevitable deterioration— maybe I am terrified to make you feel rattled by my absence. Because I know what it is like to feel utterly alone— to feel like everyone is tired of trying and fading around me. I wish I can take all that is lost within you away and dry those watery eyes that have seen so much and now so little. I wish I can take you to where it all made sense and everyone around you breathed easy and laughed freely and hoped truly. But all I can do is spend a day with you— seeking to see some trace of relief in those green eyes— and remind myself that this day will never again return… and that we are all one step closer to the edge of the void among the forgotten.

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Date: 7/7/2023 8:40:00 PM
I felt this one deep down…amazing…work
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Date: 1/22/2023 4:55:00 PM
Laura, you do have a lot to offer. I just finished reading your poems recently posted, and your words made me think, made me smile, and let me feel some sadness too. I have probably mentioned several times that this feels like a hypnotic experience. So for now, let me wish you well. I hope you find all you are searching for. At the very least, you certainly present excellent insights into what it feels like to be human and vulnerable. What a pleasure to read your poems!!
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Date: 12/18/2022 11:40:00 AM
Yes, do the best we can for each other and ourselves. That is a very mature and unselfish ideal. You write such great stories from your heart. It is a pleasure to read these.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/19/2022 5:48:00 AM
Sometimes just being there for someone who is suffering makes a difference. It’s easy to be reminded of our mortality, especially the more I have aged and seen others around me age. ~Laura
Date: 12/17/2022 12:04:00 PM
We surely can't escape death , this body gonna wear out , while we have been given a way from Jesus that is alive and has defeated death, to escape death we are walking in now to inherit life and spirit that He might reign within one now , this comment for all who read your poem my great friend, this poem is great , you have so much power and life in your words , much love to you,.keep up the great fight,. Blessed are your feet that brings the good news
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/19/2022 5:46:00 AM
Your comments give me life again, Stephan. Thanks for gracing this page with your presence. Means a lot to me all that you write! ~Laura

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