I Spent a Day With You

I spent a day with you,
gazing into your 
sad green eyes—

I could see that 
you were placated 
with the thoughts 
of death—with 
being without—
with being 
unheard.

I am afraid 
of entering that 
void alone too—
but we all must
and will.

But I 
sit near you and listen
because I am alive 
and we are ever more 
alike.

Maybe I am scared 
of the inevitable deterioration—
maybe I am terrified 
to make you feel 
rattled by my absence.

Because I know what it is like 
to feel utterly alone—
to feel like everyone is
tired of trying and
fading around me.

I wish I can take 
all that is lost within 
you away and dry 
those watery eyes
that have seen so 
much and now so 
little.

I wish I can take you 
to where it all made sense
and everyone around you 
breathed easy and laughed freely
and hoped truly.

But all I can do is 
spend a day with you—
seeking to see some 
trace of relief in those green eyes—
and remind myself that 
this day will never again 
return… and that we are all
one step closer to the edge
of the void among the 
forgotten.
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Date: 7/7/2023 8:40:00 PM
I felt this one deep down…amazing…work
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Date: 1/22/2023 4:55:00 PM
Laura, you do have a lot to offer. I just finished reading your poems recently posted, and your words made me think, made me smile, and let me feel some sadness too. I have probably mentioned several times that this feels like a hypnotic experience. So for now, let me wish you well. I hope you find all you are searching for. At the very least, you certainly present excellent insights into what it feels like to be human and vulnerable. What a pleasure to read your poems!!
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Date: 12/18/2022 11:40:00 AM
Yes, do the best we can for each other and ourselves. That is a very mature and unselfish ideal. You write such great stories from your heart. It is a pleasure to read these.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/19/2022 5:48:00 AM
Sometimes just being there for someone who is suffering makes a difference. It’s easy to be reminded of our mortality, especially the more I have aged and seen others around me age. ~Laura
Date: 12/17/2022 12:04:00 PM
We surely can't escape death , this body gonna wear out , while we have been given a way from Jesus that is alive and has defeated death, to escape death we are walking in now to inherit life and spirit that He might reign within one now , this comment for all who read your poem my great friend, this poem is great , you have so much power and life in your words , much love to you,.keep up the great fight,. Blessed are your feet that brings the good news
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/19/2022 5:46:00 AM
Your comments give me life again, Stephan. Thanks for gracing this page with your presence. Means a lot to me all that you write! ~Laura
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