I Shot Him

My finger is squeezing the trigger He falls with eyes wide open The pool of blood becomes bigger The neighbours think it’s a homicide They later learn I committed suicide Maina Von

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Sidney Beck

Date: 10/15/2011 2:27:00 PM

a good poem.....nice twist

Chiquitachiamaka Baity

Date: 8/16/2011 8:48:00 AM

oh...wow....this is great....i luv the twist.....thanks for sharing....smiles!!!!!!!!!!!

Leigh Nickolyn

Date: 7/8/2011 11:26:00 AM

This is very good. I hope you show more on Poetrysoup. I definitely want to read more. -Leigh Anne

Maina Ndugo

Date: 7/8/2011 10:56:00 AM

Thank you guys, it's my first time to join a poetry group and your comments have really encouraged me, I will also check out your poems

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/7/2011 8:06:00 PM

Welcome to Poetry Soup... enjoy the site with its many features as u continue to share wonderful words with luv....

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/7/2011 6:10:00 PM

Funny and witty write, Maina

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/7/2011 10:47:00 AM

A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Maina. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/7/2011 10:44:00 AM

What more could I ask for today? It is a beautiful day the sun shining and birds singing. Thank you for sharing your awesome poetry with us Maina. Love, Carol