Heart Rust

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This poem was a tricky revision. It has an additional three beginning lines, but I wanted it to fit for a contest about rust. Which worked well as the ending image. This is truly Daily 40 and the first lines are

Ebony opened up and swallowed a night
Causing this year’s landslide
The worry pit filled

The oldest man drinks quick sips Of the Ebony’s night poison hoping that the meager amounts wouldn’t accumulate in the soft organ tissue. But the tricky gray emotions Would trickle up from the bog’s soil Building in the heartier parts of the man’s main pump--causing rust.

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Robert Pettit

Date: 12/30/2011 11:33:00 PM

This piece leaves a lot to the reader's individual imagination. I can interpret it one way while someone else may comprehend it differently.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/28/2011 8:12:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry this morning Autumn. I hope you will continue to write and share your poetry with us. Happy New Year. Love, Carol

M.I.A .

Date: 12/27/2011 8:33:00 PM

there's a sense of aloofness in your poems that I read so far Autumn yet the passionate heart is beating wildly! pretty profound, dear poet. thank you for stopping by and your kind comment