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Haiku Attempt 1 the Mass Murder

A Shotgun Gleaming Spent Shells make noise in the forceful wind Bodies lay lifeless Note: Still learning how to create haikus feedback and help much appreciated!

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/7/2016 6:18:00 AM

Hi, Romeo.... I like your positive reply. I'm looking forward in having you visit my poems. Happy Super Bowl day ....Linda

Skat A

Date: 2/1/2016 2:28:00 PM

Hi, Agent < are you going to try the second haiku? skat

Agent Romeo
Date: 2/1/2016 5:11:00 PM

yup practice makes perfect -Romeo

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/28/2016 7:45:00 PM

Nice verse, Agent, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Agent Romeo
Date: 1/31/2016 4:06:00 PM

Thanks I'm glad you like my haiku attempt I look forward to reading your poems and receiving more feedback on my poems also my new poet friend -Romeo

Skat A

Date: 1/28/2016 4:01:00 AM

(nice attempt) dark imagery

Skat A

Date: 1/28/2016 4:00:00 AM

Hi, Agent Romeo, wrong syllable count , Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Agent Romeo
Date: 1/31/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thanks for the feedback. Next time i will get the syllable count right. I find it pleasing you enjoyed my haiku attempt. I look forward to reading your poems and receiving more feedback from you my new poet friend -Romeo