Eerie Calm Before the Storm

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An eerie calm has been encroaching as dawn's pale light approaches the realm of what is usually a normal morning but no songbirds are softly trilling today They've all taken shelter from the storm the one that rumbles ever nearer... she comes One of nature's evil forces is on her way a strengthening femme fatale I fear has set her course due north Her compass arrow pointed right at me She churns Gulf waters and raises tides gulping it down as if it were an elixir from which her hurricane winds swirl She comes to inflict harm and pillage among coastal villages and cities Not a drop of rain has fallen, but she comes. No traffic can be heard, not a single word from children waiting for a school bus. It's declared a stay home from work day Francine will rule our southern coast boasting as her pressure drops and nothing can stop her chosen path Her wrath will be done... she comes this evening, she comes for us

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/12/2024 5:13:00 AM

Dear Lin, I hope that you are all right and this might storm does very little damage. I have seen it on TV coming your way. Your poem brought out the power, destruction and the fear for the storm and filled me with prayers for those in the path. My Prayers are With You! - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Lin Lane
Date: 9/12/2024 7:02:00 AM

Thank you for your concern and prayers, Daniel. I'm ok, just a lot of debris to clean up. Usually, the day after such a storm, it's bright and sunny. Not today.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/11/2024 11:16:00 PM

Saw some news reports, terrible, just hope you will be ok, I am starting a GOFUNDME page, I am building an Ark, enough of this!!!!

Lin Lane
Date: 9/12/2024 7:01:00 AM

There was water in the street with a current. Looked like a river. I'm ok.

David Kavanagh

Date: 9/11/2024 10:56:00 AM

Time to hunker down Lin, and hope for the best, I usually envy your balmy climate, but not today for there is a price to pay living on the Gulf, you have set the stage quite powerfully of an eerie calm before the storm, the line (nothing can stop her chosen path) has a certain inexorable doom, (hopefully not)! but makes great poetry, best of luck riding it out, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 9/12/2024 7:00:00 AM

It was a rough 6 hours of rain and wind, some gusts of 90 mph, but I'm fine and so is my apartment. Thanks, David.

Paul Willason

Date: 9/11/2024 6:09:00 AM

You have captured the tension, the expectation and sense of helplessness before the destructive power of nature...each stanza builds on the pressure and culminates in the revelation of its target...us, (me and you)....holy crap ! That sets the heart racing. Dear Lin, just brilliant. You have set the scene and placed it in the realm of the believable. This is what good poetry is about.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/11/2024 6:13:00 AM

Thank you for your review, Paul. I felt the tension building in me again by reading your thoughts. Unfortunately, this weather is a reality for me this morning as Hurricane Francine makes her way towards my home.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/11/2024 6:02:00 AM

I just hope it doesn't do much damage and worse cause fatalities, I've often seen news reports and the devastation it causes, it's heartbreaking. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 9/11/2024 6:10:00 AM

It's truly heartbreaking, Tom. I've been through many that were categorized much stronger, but a hurricane at any strength does terrible damage. Besides deaths, one of the worst parts is losing electricity that sometimes takes days or weeks to recover. Thanks, Tom.