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Deceased

You were so cold Couldn't hold you Bells tol(le)d life gone

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Margaret Foster

Date: 3/4/2010 5:05:00 PM

I wasn't familiar with this form but like the sound of it. Your three lines tell a sad tale but a clear picture. I agree with Carolyn the play on told is very clever. well done. Anna-Marie. thank you for your kind comments to me this morning...cheers Margaret

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/4/2010 7:55:00 AM

Very clever use of "told" and "tolled," Anna-Marie. I'm not familiar with the than-bauk form, but you make it very interesting. Excellent play on words in your last line and a great poem, too! Love, carolyn