Dark and Sweet

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10/4/2024 for Trionet Poetry Contest sponsored by Emile Pinet

Oh, please, do hear me, hear me please. I hope you'll meet me in the park. I beg of you upon my knees. Oh, please, do hear me, hear me please. You will find me behind the trees. Oh, give it to me, don't be a narc. Oh, please, do hear me, hear me please. I hope you'll meet me in the park. Oh, please, do hear me, hear me please. I beg of you upon my knees. You will find me behind the trees. Oh, give it to me, don't be a narc. I hope you'll meet me in the park. I need it now, chocolate dark.

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 10/31/2024 4:17:00 AM

Cute, Daniel. Hope today brings you some, this Halloween promises rain here in S. Indiana. May your chocolate be dark and delicious. Congrats on your win; a great theme for the almost too repetitive form, very fitting for cravings.

David Crandall
Date: 10/31/2024 11:09:00 AM

Thanks Reason! I think I made it even more repetitive, but I figured, like you said, it would match up with the craving. I'm good with dark chocolate if I can partake responsibly - a big if.

Emile Pinet

Date: 10/29/2024 11:15:00 AM

Congratulations, David! Your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. Very well done. You were successful against a field of talented poets, my friend Emile.

David Crandall
Date: 10/30/2024 10:03:00 AM

Thanks so much Emile. I'm still enjoying your book too!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/4/2024 5:33:00 PM

Winter must be coming. I've noticed other candy poems. Your poem is very good and now I want chocolate. Dark winter chocolate.

David Crandall
Date: 10/4/2024 9:35:00 PM

Oh yes, holiday goodies!

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 10/4/2024 4:39:00 PM

What some will do for chocolate dark, even hide away in the park. Love it David… Beryl

David Crandall
Date: 10/4/2024 9:35:00 PM

Thanks Beryl! I am to dark chocolate what Homer Simpson is to donuts.