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Dance with Delusions

Dancing with delusions, sparks of hellfire Course through my lugubrious quill pen. Distorted words igniting fear, Anxiety fills crevices, Encircling, silencing, Asphyxiating. Walls closing in, Compressing. Hope fades, Doom. Dread Runs cold. Veins poisoned, Sanity slips Unmercifully. The angels are mimicked. Light dimming, darkness descends As demons mingle with the dead. Apocalyptic skies crack open To wash away all that you held sacred.

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Billie Jama

Date: 4/5/2025 3:48:00 AM

What a darkly delicious piece that you have crafted. I love the build up cadence/ ebb and flow outstanding my Onyx Rose. Well-deserved poem of the day

Sara Jama
Date: 4/5/2025 8:24:00 AM

Thank you so much my babygirl.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/31/2025 12:52:00 PM

A frightening dance! Congrats on POTD!

Sara Jama
Date: 3/31/2025 1:14:00 PM

Thank you very much.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 3/30/2025 3:36:00 AM

Congratulations Sara on having received poem of the day, I’ve enjoyed the read… Beryl

Sara Jama
Date: 3/30/2025 7:12:00 AM

Thank you very much.

Karen Jones

Date: 3/29/2025 2:49:00 PM

Congratulations on potd Sara!

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 4:43:00 PM

Thank you very much.

I Am Anaya

Date: 3/29/2025 11:21:00 AM

I see a blackened crescent moon (etheree display) which delivers hellish horizons -well-done! Congratulations on POTD Sara!

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 11:50:00 AM

Thank you very much. Yes I see the moon in the poem too.

Robert James Liguori

Date: 3/29/2025 8:48:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD. Some of the best metaphors ever in this poem!

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 10:23:00 AM

Thank you so much.

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/29/2025 8:18:00 AM

Dear Sara, I adore your ingenious use of the etheree form, which, when inverted, feels like "walls closing in", like a mental implosion in the first stanza, to then expanding in the upright position the feelings of madness and torment in the second stanza. Impactful use of dark imagery, syllables and line lengths throughout! I admire your ability to harness a "dance with delusions" into the etheree framework which serves to enhance your desolate imagery to great physical and psychological effect. Congratulations for POTD honors! Worthy and well-deserving. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 10:32:00 AM

Thank you very much for the insightful feedback. I truly appreciate it.

Di11y Da11y

Date: 3/29/2025 7:56:00 AM

Congratulations on poem of the day Sara :) great held tension used in this etheree like lungs closing in and allowing in just enough air to be torturous. Makes me see the form in a new light entirely and I like it :)

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 10:23:00 AM

Thank you so much for the wonderful feedback. I can make anything dark lol.

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 3/29/2025 6:15:00 AM

Hello Sara, congratulations on your POTD win. Wishing you a wonderful weekend as you celebrate your win.

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:18:00 AM

Thank you very much. Wishing you a wonderful weekend too.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/29/2025 6:08:00 AM

- Sara,congratulations on your p.o.t.d. :) - hugs

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:20:00 AM

Thank you very much.

Ink Empress

Date: 3/29/2025 5:40:00 AM

Oh look who got potd! Congrats grumpy! I know you care lol! Happy to see you featured!

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:21:00 AM

Thank you Ink.

David Kavanagh

Date: 3/29/2025 4:49:00 AM

Congratulations Sara, on your delusional dance of death being recognised as POTD, not very often do we see a Etheree getting the honour, but it’s totally deserved here in this dark piece I can totally relate to on certain days, cheers David

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:22:00 AM

Thank you very much for the kind feedback.

Lin Lane

Date: 3/29/2025 4:46:00 AM

Congratulations on having this fear filled poetry recognized as potd, Sara.

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:23:00 AM

Thank you very much.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 3/29/2025 3:39:00 AM

Sara, well penned, congratulations on POTD.

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:23:00 AM

Thank you very much.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/29/2025 1:05:00 AM

Quite a dark verse Sara, congratulations to you on today's POTD honour. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Sara Jama
Date: 3/29/2025 7:24:00 AM

Thank you very much.

Ink Empress

Date: 3/28/2025 8:04:00 AM

I love how youv used the alt prompt here “ dancing with delusions” and you wrote an etheree! It reminds me of how we used to do collabs , and i remember we wrote a double etheree together once and nana didnt like something dark i had written , remember? Hah! Gosh! Weve known each other for too long now grumpy! And every word in this is so so good! And wow youv used also alliterations! A fave this is for me! For sure! Nailed it! You are the queen of darkness!

Ink Empress
Date: 3/29/2025 5:43:00 AM

Well im still black rainbows and unicorns. Thats why nana loved me! I am barbie lololol

Sara Jama
Date: 3/28/2025 8:10:00 AM

Yes I remember. Nana was unicorns and rainbows. Definitely not us. Hahaha. And yes we have known each other for a long time. One day old and grey. Lol. Thank you for all the support.