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Dance of Death - Iron Maiden Contest

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"When you're lying in your sleep, when you're lying in your bed And you wake from your dreams to go dancing with the dead" Dance of Death, Iron Maiden
You are lying in your sleep, as you are lying in your bed Wake from your dreams, go dancing with the dead Dispose of your misconceptions, let yourself fall deep As you are lying in your bed, you are lying in your sleep Eyes open with gaze intent, map this real view You are aware reality, is not what you really knew Let focus find it's lingo, let all forevers augment Map this real view, eyes open with gaze intent Softly softly guided, hand taken with care Dancing with the dead, unhooks held tight despair Gentle waltz of love and grace, all your fears confided Hand taken with care, softly softly guided Lead back to truly living, now freed from all self hate Gifted new perspective, inner peace create Don't regret years wasted, though tough and unforgiving Now freed from all self hate, lead back to truly living Lay safely in your bed, peaceful and protected in sleep Dancing does revitalise, these lives we wish to keep Ancestrally we are cherished, there is no need to dread Peaceful and protected in sleep, lay safely in your bed

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Date: 4/7/2025 1:04:00 AM
Wonderful. Congratulations on your win ...
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/7/2025 2:55:00 AM
Thank you Kai, appreciated :)
Date: 4/2/2025 7:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!
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Date: 4/3/2025 11:07:00 AM
Thank you Thriveni - appreciated :)
Date: 4/2/2025 4:12:00 PM
Here is artwork at its best. Thanks for writing.
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Date: 4/3/2025 11:07:00 AM
Thanks Robert, glad you liked it so much :)
Date: 3/28/2025 10:17:00 AM
Hypnotizing. Spellbinding's soothe the soul with that gentle voice I dance along to healing peace, you are a delightful wellness guru ~ Lovely quatrain's Dilly
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Date: 3/28/2025 3:00:00 PM
Aww so kind Anaya! Thank you! Glad you enjoyed x
Date: 3/28/2025 7:47:00 AM
You have a way of making a (Dance of death) sound like a lullaby with this wonderful narration full of hypnotic cadence, do we have enough time to claw back wasted years? I guess, but only if we start straight away! A beautifully written and recited poem, that connects us back to our forebears gone, and exudes with inner peace, A top contender for contest, cheers David
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/28/2025 9:34:00 AM
It depends on how many lifetimes we live I suppose and whether we are distinct as an entity in each. I'm delighted with your positive feedback on my narration. When I listen I hear the plosives, my coat russling and a few hard edges on my accent. I didn't want to follow in Iron Maiden's footsteps for this theme, so thought I'd shift the emphasis to something nicer. Plus I have to watch I don't scare myself haha. Thank you so much for stopping by :)
Date: 3/28/2025 7:10:00 AM
What Inky said....You recited this one very well... Not sure about the sleeping clinic though.... poetry shouldn't make us fall.asleep DD ..You would be great at ASMR..
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/28/2025 9:25:00 AM
Aww thank you! I know you have significant experience in this regard. I appreciate your vote of confidence :)
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2025 8:05:00 AM
You don't really need a mic... voice recorders on the phone use the mic.. then you may need to convert then into mp3 and upload onto here... Find an open mic night..but remember spoken word is different to page poetry... also thus audio sounded fine. Was read really well
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Date: 3/28/2025 7:43:00 AM
I suppose it depends where their dreams take them haha. I need a proper microphone and the inclination to do more than one take first. At some point I'd love to do spoken word. I think I need to accidentally find myself at an open mic night with a short poem in my pocket to try though :) thanks for your kindness :)
Date: 3/28/2025 4:15:00 AM
Dear DD, This is so soothing and so organic lol! Ah how soul warming and calming is the way youv read your quatrain, and your choice of words are so soft and subtle and delicate like a beautiful lullaby spoken in the most poetic manner. Your take on the lyrics is so beautiful, and i love the way it flows so well! Especially love “ Lead back to truly living, now freed from all self hate Gifted new perspective, inner peace create” thoughts we get when in bed in silence sometimes, you have written one that would put even the worst insomniac to sleep and rest . Hah’ maybe you should open a sleep virtual poetic clinic, with these spoken words. Would reach places for sure! A fave this is! Best wishes for the contest … sending you light always
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Date: 3/28/2025 5:15:00 AM
Ahh you're such a sweet treat Ink :) thank you for this enthused review. I'm just thinking what my strapline could be... "poetic pillow talk, be soothed to sleep whilst your DNA gets the glow up it deserves" haha :) thank you also for the fave and the light, I'm so spoiled here lol

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