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I Choose to Dwell in the Clouds 

Original quote by Writer: Clouds signal me to stay high no matter the hour; no matter the weather. (March 9th, 2025)

 

as a child, I perceived the wonderment of Clouds. and elders likewise contemplated the curious celebrity of them the solemnity of shape-shifting skyships their charity of rain: encouraging fruit greening hills irrigating joys keeping watch around the earth in as enviable a perch as the risen sun or mystic moon that guides tides. sun runs apace moon whisks its baton away but Clouds stay high, perpetual imprints covering Space and Time. Could Clouds be God's eyes? *** when I was -abecedarian- counting from one to three, I licked my lips at Clouds reckoning I'd catch them like docile butterflies, and discern the flavors of miracle floss: must be rose-white sugar some barley flour lamb's fleece and goose feathers the elders, lofty and wise, disparaged my foolish games. I tugged on the edge of their mountainous faces: wispy chins transient strands billowy beards closest clouds I'd seen Proximal nimbi and their dust trail of ginger, onion, and clove pulled pork, frizzled cod, light ashtray lingered... I caught those crazy hairs so hard candy-coated raindrops fell!

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Date: 3/16/2025 2:54:00 PM
I really dig the recipe for good measure. CrAzy compelling poetry. Congratulations on your Trophy, Trina Layne! ~ I Am Anaya
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/17/2025 12:27:00 PM
Thank you, Anaya. Congrats to you as well :)
Date: 3/16/2025 3:00:00 AM
Mxua! This is just too beautiful and so deserving of 1st place, Trina. "Could clouds be God's eyes?" I loved that line. I gotta fave...
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/16/2025 7:24:00 AM
Thank you so much :) It's one of my favorites as well.
Date: 3/15/2025 10:09:00 PM
This is interesting form dear poet, so silken verse.I could hear you recite! beautiful. congratulations on your top win dear friend. three cheers!!! Happy writing.
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/16/2025 7:25:00 AM
Thank you! I appreciate your continued encouragement.
Date: 3/15/2025 7:41:00 PM
Dear Trina, your enchanting eloquence stirs my soul deeply. A thoughtful, exceptional, creatively thought-provoking piece. Worthy of deep dives into this artistic verse over and again. Incredible! Congratulations for your shining trophy win in Tom’s esteemed contest. This poem and your golden pen are so very special. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/16/2025 7:27:00 AM
I'm so happy that you were touched by it. It's autobiographical too in many ways. I was a weird child. Many thanks!
Date: 3/15/2025 5:26:00 PM
Love the stream of consciousness and creative imagery you present in this outstanding poem, Trina! The way it is structured, like a flowing train of clouds, is perfect! Congrats on your well deserved win! :)
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 6:54:00 PM
Thank you so much, Laura.
Date: 3/15/2025 4:35:00 PM
Congratulations Trina. I love the creative structural ordering of words, thoughts, images in your fine posting. "I licked my lips at Clouds reckoning I'd catch them" - a fanciful image so childlike + endearing. Imaginative + praiseworthy.
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 6:55:00 PM
:)
Date: 3/15/2025 11:29:00 AM
Some might question my choice of first place here, but I have to simply say: this is pure poetry.! Period. Wonderful, whimsical, fanciful take on the theme Trina. Congrats
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 12:23:00 PM
Thanks so much! I enjoy writing about nature and clouds are awesome. There is a lot you can explore. It was a great prompt. I had fun responding to it.

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