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Close My Eyes and Dance Away

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Almost a stanzaic meter/metre :)

The story of Little Lord Fauntleroy has a special meaning for me. The little boy Cedric, living a very humble life, only to find out he is the heir to an incredible grumpy old Lord. In the end he turns everyone around, making them happy just because of who he is. The book was very important when published, and caused a hype, even the stylish clothing of the boy has become quite famous..

I read this book while away, from country to country I took it with me, in the end I lost it somehwere and that still hurts a lot. Even though the connotation in this poem isn't that positive.

Give me all of my private time I will succumb without a fight And later be your every whim First those few seconds of respite Before once more I crawl through slime Notice how once my gown was white But cooked with silted tears and grime Give me one minute of your day To bend and chew on and enjoy Before you take it all away To you I am no more than a toy Commodity for you to play Inconvenience, little joy Your Little Lord Fauntleroy Give me a second and I crawl - To sleep, forget about the day - To the stone against the wall Close my eyes and dance away Jump so high and never fall The uncrowned king of ballet Applauded in the dance hall My mind is free, my mind is mine My words have meaning, see them shine *** March 13, 2017 © Darren White

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/18/2017 3:23:00 AM

Thanks for the notes you put up. What a shame, that you have lost the book. But you will always have it inside you. Kai

Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 3:47:00 AM

Thank you, Kai. Yes it does indeed :) But i am also the sort of person that loves books, I am a notorious book sniffer hah.

Carole Duet

Date: 3/15/2017 12:44:00 AM

This poem packs a huge wallup, Darren. So full of emotion: dread, dreams, love, hate...and it makes my heart hurt. You are such a talent.

Darren White
Date: 3/15/2017 1:15:00 AM

All of that and then some, Carole, thank you :)

Michael Coy

Date: 3/14/2017 11:52:00 AM

This is almost unbearably poignant. In terms of its technical brilliance, the manipulation of rhyme and syntax shines out - but I also marvel at your mastery of casual, colloquial English. And that word "succumb" is to die for!

Darren White
Date: 3/14/2017 12:15:00 PM

Thank you for recognising the sadness my friend. Succumb is to die for yes hah :) Thank you for your wonderful comment, humbled...

Sara Ella

Date: 3/13/2017 6:35:00 PM

As Lisa pointed out, I see that time theme and looked up the story too :) I learn so much from your poems and enjoy just reading them. Your mind is free and thank goodness for that as you share your talent here.

Darren White
Date: 3/14/2017 12:22:00 AM

It's not selfish dear friend :) I'll probably add a small bit about Fauntleroy here in the notes.

Sara Ella
Date: 3/13/2017 6:40:00 PM

selfish, i think that last statement. I am so glad that you wish to share your writing here - you, as a really wonderful person, shine with your words.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/13/2017 11:32:00 AM

True, shining words. Do not be shy and put up a bit of 'Little Lord Fauntleroy's story, maybe. This is a good write, Kai

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 12:25:00 PM

I might, maybe add it as a note, thanks :)

Tim Smith

Date: 3/13/2017 9:35:00 AM

They are shining here...Such loveliness

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 9:39:00 AM

Thank you Tim, and how are you this morning?

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/13/2017 7:05:00 AM

this brings sunshine on the page..how beautiful, darren..huggs

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 7:13:00 AM

Nette, thank you, I am happy to bring you some sunshine :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/13/2017 4:43:00 AM

-- Prego --

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 4:50:00 AM

:) Shukran, as we say in Egypt.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/13/2017 4:28:00 AM

Good Morning Darren. There is nothing I could say to this. Anything would be significant. Just know in my eyes you have achieved all the poetic elements especially the emotive factor. You honestly have the poetic flair and touch. "Give me all of my private time" "Give me one minute of your day" Give me a second and I crawl" There are no words for that expression. May such beauty remain within you always. I think this was well done I'll have to double check (ha ha)

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 4:31:00 AM

Hah Lisa, Grazie again! You noticed that so well, that time element in there. Thank you for seeing the poetic value in my words!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/13/2017 4:00:00 AM

I see you shine..Indeed you are your own .Nobody elses...And always remember that dear Darren.Excellent poem..A fave.

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 4:21:00 AM

I am myself. Charmain, and so are you. Thank you dear friend :)