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choice at the granular level

When I've not slept well I feel like I catch emotion in the air Like an invisible sandstorm Wearing me down further My eyes are pained to be open I can't catch my breath Not if I scrabble for it In the same space I could breathe freely If only I knew choice from chaos

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David Kavanagh

Date: 1/3/2024 9:46:00 AM

Crumbling to pieces after a horrible night’s sleep, you describe the mind and how it disintegrates into a netherworld, somewhere between autopilot and somnambulism, brilliantly described using a subconscious scape, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/3/2024 10:40:00 AM

Thank you David, I wasn't nearly so bad once I'd just decided to get on with stuff... Although I was fairly dramatic if anyone asked how I was before 11am now I think back haha

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 1/3/2024 9:42:00 AM

Those nagging thoughts do seem to appear just in time to prevent peaceful sleep. I hope you discover the antidote. It's said to read a few pages of a book. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. The poem is very apropos for these chaotic times.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/3/2024 10:37:00 AM

Thanks Hilda, I wrote several contest poems and probably should have just read a book. I'll give it a try tonight x

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/3/2024 8:19:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your sad/yet wonderful write. We all need sleep but it is hard for some to get. I wish you peaceful sleep. Have a blessed day sleeping away..........

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/3/2024 9:38:00 AM

Thank you Paula x

John Lawless

Date: 1/3/2024 4:53:00 AM

perhaps the choice is in the chaos and vice versa....it's early....haven't had my coffee yet

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/3/2024 9:38:00 AM

Of course they are wise words - unlike how I just wondered if I could make a new word and came up with chaoce or choaos