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As dusk dawned In hushed dark solace, Awareness battled Comatose. One question, pleading: Terminate this torment, Honour this last wish, Yearning. Only so much love can be lost; Pain be carried; Blood be spilt... Horror. In muted shine, Deadened voices, Monitored beep beep, Kindness. Salty moist wiped away With mellow moves In a tone that provides Humanity. *** January 31, 2017

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Date: 2/1/2017 2:23:00 AM
If the opening unravels the poem, the ending wraps the poem up, yes, in humanity. All things pass. JH
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Darren White
Date: 2/1/2017 2:47:00 AM
Yes, exactly in humanity. And everything passes.....
Date: 1/31/2017 7:11:00 AM
They will one day invent a drug that will wipe out certain memories! The only one that I know of for now is 'Time'. It may not wipe them out, but it helps to fade a little! A powerful write, Duir!
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Darren White
Date: 1/31/2017 7:52:00 AM
Thanks Budgie, I hope you are right.

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