Notes About The Poem

This wasn't difficult to remember - it's played in my mind 40 gaZillion times


 

Broken

What a lonely, peculiar, eccentric figure i must be. A girl, in a garden, crying at an iPad, in the dark. 

Earlier, at school... 

It was a clear spelling out, like steel cuts thru fruit. 

As he spoke he looked down and away, his gorgeous face blank and indifferent, as if I were wasting his time or he was talking to a child needing an obvious truth taught quickly. 

When he finally looked back at me, I saw no pity in his impersonal, hazel eyes. 

I couldn't breathe, I couldn't think, I needed time to contemplate the universe's new laws. 

Can a girl just suddenly die of heart-ache?? because I was sure my heart had stopped, locked and frozen. 

Finally, I gasped in this impossible new air - the force of it made me hold the cold-iron stair railing - the game is rough. 

He's so... male - all chase and careless passion - intelligent teaser, a skilled steersman of excited climates... Oh, you simply have no idea. 

And now he was, gone, still there, but gone to me - as if he'd transformed into a hologram or had begun to orbit some other sun, he just... 

"You made me feel special." I said. 

I had lost my balance on this faithless and unequal world, where heaven so cruelly punishes desires. 

"You made me feel I mattered, such a favor." I said, absentmindedly, as I turned, and went back up the three steps into school.

I don't think I looked back at him as the door closed. After all, he wasn't there any more. 

I think he called my name, like a question...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020


Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 12/4/2020 11:27:00 AM
You are such a good story teller, Anais, I was going to suggest that you should consider writing short stories, but I see that you already have some posted. I need to get with the program. I shall check out your stories this weekend. :)
Login to Reply
Vionet Avatar
Anais Vionet
Date: 12/4/2020 12:07:00 PM
Thank you! ooo! OUTSTANDING! I don't think they're read much - WARNING - some are just plain silliness (most of them??), I try different styles. ONE is a like a GRAPHIC NOVEL =] Have a great weekend!
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter