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Boys carry their snow sleds up, up to the highest peak scaling risk their voices pitched chattering noise of expectation frozen giddiness on snow packed hills boys belly flop onto plastic sleighs bubble-headed jauntiness launches them lunging down, down bewildering "swish" of speed smashing white drifts projectiles scattered boys tossed in snowbanks like pizza dough spinning baked together in joy pushing the balance of extreme runs repeated brash, blunt, bold epic span of freedom ignoring downfalls from ill timed moves in a lost sense of direction gleefully tired snow flecked boys wheeze the icy air make their way home their talk clotted with bravado beneath it, the unspoken promise to never tire of boyhood in twilight, the slopes gleam gouged by sled marks that clear a path for growth targeted direction and if boys fall from the path are there souls who'll notice? when ruts threaten when sleds teeter in unruly spaces Poem composed February 2, 2022

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Date: 1/10/2024 4:37:00 AM
Back to say heartiest congratulations on your win!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 1/10/2024 6:40:00 AM
Hello Karen. Your return to my small posting is much valued. Thank you for your stop by + congratulatory message. Be well. Brian
Date: 7/3/2022 3:58:00 AM
The joys of boyhood and all its innocence is well penned here. Loved the imagery.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/3/2022 6:59:00 AM
Thank you Karen. Sometimes life gives you the nudge to write of childhood joy. Sincerest regards. Brian
Date: 2/13/2022 6:53:00 PM
Oh, some great phrases here! I love "their talk clotted with bravado"... excellent! This piece is like a snapshot of childhood in winter. It brought me back to the hill where we used to sled. Your ending is like a twist... thoughtful rather than whimsical. Nicely done!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/13/2022 7:02:00 PM
Hello Katharine. Your insightful comments are much appreciated. I did strive for a turn in the final 7 lines of the piece. The boys tumble + fall on snowy hills. They pick themselves up + begin again. But what of the later paths in boy - reckless lives? Are there others to rescue those who fall? Thank you for your note. Be well. Brian
Date: 2/4/2022 1:19:00 AM
Goodness Brian! a hearty poem throughout! Well done!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/4/2022 6:06:00 AM
Thank you, James. We have a sizable snow hill near us. Hearty boys hitting the hill sparked the write. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 2/4/2022 1:07:00 AM
The boisterous boyhood days are powerfully replayed here. Boys when they engage in snow games, they don't care if the weather is too cold or if they fall through a misdirected move. Great penning, Brian !
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/4/2022 6:09:00 AM
My appreciation, Valsa, for your stop by + encouraging words. I hope that all is well with you. Sincerely, Brian
Date: 2/3/2022 10:58:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Brian. Excellent form and imagery. Neva
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/3/2022 11:17:00 AM
Your supportive words are most appreciated, Neva. Hope that you are well. All the best, Brian
Date: 2/3/2022 8:06:00 AM
Congrats on your win!:)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/3/2022 9:07:00 AM
Thank you, Brenda, for your positive feedback on my poem. Its contest recognition was unexpected. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 2/3/2022 7:10:00 AM
Brian, This is a beautiful, picturesque descriptive piece of writing about amazing boyhood and sledding. I am sure, this descriptions will bring favourite memories of many. I really love this poem, and your poetic style. Sending to my faves. Best wishes ~ Mala
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/3/2022 7:48:00 AM
My appreciation for your supportive take on my posting, Mala. I wanted to conclude with a more problematic view of a fall from paths trodden, so the poem may not be too popular. However, your kind comments are a push to my pen. Much appreciation. Brian
Date: 2/1/2022 9:57:00 PM
Brian, this is a marvelous, entertaining piece of writing. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It brought back so many memories of sledding when I was a boy. Thanks for sharing this.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/2/2022 6:20:00 AM
Thank you Milton, for your affirmative note on my winter piece on boyhood sled bravado. I appreciate your stop by + thumbs up. All the best. Brian

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