Bone Beach

B Banal really, how we are just composites O Objectively rotting to join dust & sand N Not many preserved enough to be counted E Existence just a temporary problem B Bones so indistinguishable E Every fragment of who we are dissolves A Achingly absorbed with no rejection at the end C Comfort like that should be gifted to the living H Heaven is resting in peace

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John Lawless

Date: 10/19/2024 8:51:00 AM

an ingenious take on the prompt DD. I will toy with the line "comfort like that should be gifted to the living" as I ponder the vicissitudes of live

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/19/2024 9:51:00 AM

Haha all I can think of now is lobotomies! We've got to experience some extremes to make any of it at all worth while :) thanks for stopping by :)

Ink Empress

Date: 10/18/2024 3:26:00 AM

Dear DD, you did such an introspective and somber take on the prompt, in the form of acrostic! I love this especially the lines “Comfort like that should be gifted to the living Heaven is resting in peace” So evocative and touching and goes well with the mood youv gone for. Existence is such a temporary problem but it feels often as permanent. I can feel so many emotions flowing within your lines like always, you write from your heart, so authentic. Pleasure reading this. Best wishes.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/18/2024 3:53:00 AM

Thank you Ink, I occasionally just start an acrostic to see where it might go with no thoughts in mind. They can make great leaps from single word choices, so I find them a comfortable fall back form when I'm short on ideas. I think the benefit of having an alias is you don't need to be as inhibited with random thoughts for poems. Thank you for your kind words, your visit is much appreciated x

David Kavanagh

Date: 10/18/2024 2:49:00 AM

Beautiful message and super Acrostic Dilly, our physical parts are absorbed back into the surroundings as energy and produce heat, consciousness I believe is different, and possibly reacts with the quantum realm, which leads to mind bending possibilities, (another loop perhaps) sorry for going off piste, (heaven) insofar as we know is resting in peace, great one for contest methinks, existence is a temporary problem, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/18/2024 3:49:00 AM

Haha I have distinct holes in my common sense and my intellect - I can open doors to other universes (maybe) but not gathered the skill to fully master those in shops and offices lol

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/18/2024 3:37:00 AM

I suppose that all depends on which type of ignorance,you are certainly not lacking common sense knowledge, :)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/18/2024 3:13:00 AM

Thank you David, as you'll likely have picked up I subscribe to numerous theories simultaneously when it comes to beyond (life and even the here and now of consciousness). I'm perhaps more on the Red Dwarf (series) level of understanding the universe as the fancy words scare me off. But something makes sense - just impossible to articulate or even fully hold as a thought. It's fun pondering though and I'm sure one of those 'the more you know the more you realise you don't know' kind of things. Ignorance is bliss I'm told

Karen Jones

Date: 10/17/2024 11:38:00 PM

Thought provoking acrostic and very creative! Love it! Good luck in the contest!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/17/2024 11:45:00 PM

Thank you Karen, acrostics are like taking a stroll with a stranger at times - I totally wasn't sure where this was going to go :)