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Beneath the undercurrent

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For the Alphabet Soup prompt by Joseph May.

Aphotic beneath countless depths energy fleeting, gloom haunting insipid jailers keep locks metaphorical never owning peace, quarrel, rage, surrender torture understated, verve waned xanthic ylem zombie

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/16/2025 5:40:00 AM

I love " torture understated and " verve waned" verve! A word i love , and also the way youv used xyz is impressive as those are the hardest for me in abcs. And your Y word is new for me, atleast i dont remember seeing it, think its a scientific word? Clever and such a deeply meaningful take! This contest looks like so much fun and you did it so well! Pleasure reading! Sending you light always

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/16/2025 11:46:00 AM

I nearly gave up when I got to x lol - but I'd got so far I needed to drag it over the line kicking and screaming haha. I'd never heard of ylem before and it's tricky to use a word just from the definition, so I'm 50/50 whether it definitely works but that's what poetic license is for :) it was fun to do though but not sure there enough decent x and y words to make a habit out of it :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/15/2025 1:56:00 PM

WOW!!! What a creative write. Love It... "Good Luck" with this one. I started one but can not find the ending. Maybe it will come to me. Have a blessed day................

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/15/2025 2:00:00 PM

It's certainly tricky for the final few words! Good luck with the thesaurus - hope you find the perfect fit. Thank you for your comment

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/15/2025 10:30:00 AM

Great use of ylem, my first time seeing it!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/15/2025 10:38:00 AM

Thanks Kim, it was a bit of a stretch but think it fits :)