Beachcomber

Symptoms in sand from my passing footprints ocean is sick in waves As I sag with water while the salt burns symptoms in sand A dizzying sprite haunts the shores of yesterday from my passing footprints The tide lurches still... for my heart ocean is sick in waves

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Ink Empress

Date: 6/21/2024 3:01:00 PM

Ocean was sick in waves yesterday here, i went for snorkeling though and imagine, the hassle, i went all the way deep, swam with sharks and beautiful fishes, love this verse so well woven dear paige and delivered! Always a pleasure reading your work. Sending you light always

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/21/2024 9:55:00 AM

Paige, your words carry the plaintive call of the ocean to be healed! Truly we are only "passing footprints" as the ocean tides move and flow in their continuous tidal life even past our moments here on this earth. This is a wonderfully written poem, poignant with metaphors and depth. Sending you blessings and gratitude for this marvelous poem.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/20/2024 4:21:00 PM

I wish I had the remedy. Toilets flush into it, which I think is a shame. We need to clean up beaches. A good poem.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/20/2024 10:34:00 AM

Great emotive write! Makes me feel the pain.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 6/20/2024 4:53:00 AM

Dear Paige, What a mesmerizing dance of words. I love the way you evoke the ocean’s illness through footprints and salt burns. I think it is hauntingly beautiful. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Mat Ignacio

Date: 6/19/2024 8:38:00 PM

nice contrasts and images - can feel the disequalibrium in this

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/19/2024 6:26:00 PM

Dear Paige, my soulful poetess friend, I love the use of repetition in poetry, and here, I think you use it effectively. I enjoyed the solemn reflective feeling of this piece, and the title too. Great personification with "ocean is sick in waves". Your poetic artistry shines! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 6/19/2024 1:53:00 PM

Your words create perfect poetic imagery here... nice one Paige..