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Written on 15th April 2024

During a bad storm one night I turned on my television Grey and black flickering lines appeared, obscuring my vision I went outside and saw the aerial had bent over but it would have to wait Tomorrow I'd get up on the roof and try and put it straight. Next day the storm had passed, and I put my ladders against the wall And as I started to climb my wife said " Take care and don't fall" "No worries darling " I said , "I've done this many times before" When I was on the roof my pliers fell from my hand and I quietly swore. I moved slowly toward the ladders and leant my leg across And then felt my leg go as I slipped on some wet moss Suddenly, it went black and quiet and there wasn't a sound In a second, I'd fallen ten feet and landed on my back on the ground. Next thing I knew I was walking down a street that I didn't know Then caught sight of my reflection in a tailor's shop window I noticed I was wearing a flat cap, a waistcoat, and boots on my feet And could hear the sounds of coaches and horses up and down the street. Strangers passing me on the street said "A very good day to you sir" A few people seemed to recognise me and addressed me as doctor I thought where is this strange place? , I've never been here before As I got to the end of the street I stopped at a house with a red door. Something within me told me look in my pocket for my house key And as I inserted the key and opened it a woman stood before me Then two little girls in long dresses ran towards me shouting "Papa" For some strange unknown reason, I knew I was in the Victorian era. We all went into what was a large dining room and we sat down Then a maid appeared with a joint of beef from the market in town The lady who it seemed was my wife then asked me how was my day? I looked at her very strangely; and I just didn't know what to say. Then I said "Yes, it was busy, I had cases of scabies and gout Poor living standards are the cause, there's a lot of it about" Also, lots of men with missing limbs are returning from Crimea It angers me to see that people don't care and have no idea". "Oh dear" said my wife "People believe what they read in the newspaper I read that many men thought they were going on an adventure" We finished our meal and my young daughters wanted to play One said "Papa, can we go on the swing" I said "Okay, lead the way". The next day I retraced my steps, and headed for my surgery But I was getting flash backs of another time, was I losing my sanity? I noticed the calendar in my surgery said May, eighteen fifty-six Maybe I was working too hard, and my mind was playing tricks. Days became weeks and then months and soon a year had gone by But I was still getting flashbacks and I couldn't understand why Every evening, I returned home, my wife and daughters would greet me And when my daughters went to bed, I'd read them a bedtime story. One Friday I'd been working late and outside it was now a dark night A dense fog hung low that was illuminated yellow, by the glow of gaslight I made for home down the long-deserted street, but I had a feeling of dread It was eerily quiet then someone hit me, on the back of my head. There was a bright flash, then it went dark and I opened my eyes And then what happened next took me completely by surprise Two men in green paramedic's uniforms asked me if I was feeling all right It was a bright sunny day and no longer was it a dark foggy night. Then my wife leaned over me and I could see she'd been crying She said she'd feared the worst and thought that I was dying "How long was I unconscious for" ? I asked her, I just had to know She held my hand and answered, "About half an hour or so". They lifted me carefully onto a stretcher and placed me in the ambulance Then for a short time I lay motionless and went into a deep trance I was drifting from my present surroundings back to my Victorian life And for a moment I saw my two young daughters and my other wife. We arrived at the hospital and my injuries were quite severe The doctor told me I'd need to rest my back for about a year I got thinking about my experience of that time long ago Had I entered a parallel world? or was it a coma?, I don't think I'll ever know. Written On The Fifteenth Of April 2024

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Date: 11/13/2024 7:21:00 AM
Or was it, as i wondered, a previous life? I see there are more parts to this! Great! I look forward to reading them…. So like the format, your style, and the story. Inspiring.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/13/2024 7:28:00 AM
Thank you very much Sally I'm happy you enjoyed it. I know many people prefer shorter poems but once I start I forget to stop. I wrote another 1856 Revisited, it's in two parts as it was too long. Tom
Date: 8/31/2024 12:07:00 PM
Truly remarkable, a little sad, to have another wife and two daughters you'd never see again.
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Date: 8/31/2024 12:32:00 PM
Thank you very much Alesia, it was an episode of Star Trek that inspired this one, The Inner Light. I was thinking of a sequel but as yet still in the thinking stage. Tom
Date: 6/15/2024 4:57:00 PM
A fun time travel adventure Tom. You never cease to thrill with your stories. Hope all is well. :)
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Date: 6/15/2024 10:57:00 PM
Thank you very much Linda, I’ve been travelling a lot lately so haven’t been around much. I’m keeping well and I hope you are too. Have a lovely weekend. Tom
Date: 6/2/2024 10:41:00 AM
Hello tom, I enjoyed this poem. it sounds like you went back into time. Then c ame back again. Where are you going on your trip? Enjoy your day my cfriend. /Darlene/
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Date: 6/3/2024 10:23:00 AM
Hello Tom. I hope that you and your wife had an enjoyable time in Turkey. Your welcome. Tom. Enjoy your day. /Darlene/
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Date: 6/2/2024 10:47:00 AM
Thank you very much Darlene, I'm happy you enjoyed it. I'm just back from Turkey so at home now. Hope you're keeping well and enjoying your weekend. Tom
Date: 5/31/2024 5:35:00 AM
Oh lovely, lovely one Tom, you took me through the journey, it was very engaging. So many thoughts and questions in here, I was thinking for you too. Where could he have gone? Probably your other life in a dream? Because Dreams become too real sometimes and I always think it's us in another realm. In all, I think you preferred the other wife and enjoyed reading bedtime Stories to your girls. Cheers.
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Date: 5/31/2024 6:03:00 AM
Thank you very much Tonye, I think I had the best of both worlds, I read about people having experiences like that and were able to describe things in great detail. Hope you have a lovely weekend. Tom
Date: 5/25/2024 8:15:00 AM
I really enjoyed this intriguing story, Tom, it begs for a sequel. Nicely done. Hope all is well with you and yours. John
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Date: 5/25/2024 9:39:00 AM
Thank you very much John, I'm glad you enjoyed it. All good with me hope you are too, I'm travelling again, greetings from Turkey. Tom
Date: 5/24/2024 6:29:00 AM
I gave this another read. You are truly a talented story teller. It was well worth reading again.
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Date: 5/24/2024 7:26:00 AM
Thank you very much for your return visit Richard, I'm happy you enjoyed it a second time, greetings from Turkey. I'm travelling again. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Date: 5/19/2024 9:41:00 AM
Great story, Tom, nice imagination.. If only one could live twice.. Great job, congratulations:)
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Date: 5/19/2024 10:20:00 AM
Thank you very much Joanna, I’m happy you enjoyed it. I hope you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 5/16/2024 3:05:00 PM
In a short amount of time you traveled through the centuries and then back to the present, A story well told Tom
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Date: 5/16/2024 11:29:00 PM
Thank you very much Joseph I'm pleased that you enjoyed the story. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
Date: 5/16/2024 2:06:00 PM
Quite imaginative storytelling, Tom. Really captivating. Havea restful and pleasant evening. All the best. ~
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Date: 5/16/2024 2:45:00 PM
Thank you very much Regina, I'm happy you enjoyed it. I hope you are keeping well and having a good week. Tom
Date: 5/14/2024 11:59:00 AM
Tom, your story of poetry is quite remarkable. My friend, your poetry does a wonderful job of describing your exciting journey. The narrative was fascinating, and your usual riveting style shone through. Hope you have an amazing day, and thanks for your comment on my page!
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Date: 5/14/2024 2:28:00 PM
Thank you very much Lasaad, I'm happy that you enjoyed it. It was an episode of Star Trek that inspired this one. I've read some accounts of it actually happening to people. I'm sure there's more to our earthly life than we know. Tom
Date: 5/14/2024 12:45:00 AM
Well I must say I am impressed Tom what a Great ceeation..I doff my cap.!! Specially the Paragraph about the Crimean war..! You have Real depth of character is my summation.' You should write Florence Nightingale into another one..Hey being a doctor fits that just Write.!! May you be blessed.)
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Date: 5/14/2024 1:39:00 AM
Thank you very much Joe, I'm happy you enjoyed the story. I've read about people experiencing similar flashbacks and are able to describe everything in perfect detail, it does make you wonder. I hope you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 5/9/2024 8:15:00 AM
I read your comment to Sam. Must have been the episode where Picard lives a life with a different family. Unless your ribbing us and it really happened to you. Your storytelling is impeccable and sublime!
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Date: 5/9/2024 8:56:00 AM
Thank you very much Kim, no it was definitely that episode that inspired me. It came to mind when I was in Crete and went with it. I did read up on cases like it. I believe there's definitely another side to our existence be it another dimension or parallel universe. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Date: 5/8/2024 8:38:00 PM
Spectacular story telling. A true pleasure to read.
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Date: 5/8/2024 9:58:00 PM
Thank you very much Richard, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 5/7/2024 3:25:00 PM
What a wonderful read Tom! You kept me right at the edge of my seat! I love it!!!
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Date: 5/8/2024 12:26:00 AM
Thank you Mark, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. An episode of Star Trek inspired it. Tom
Date: 5/7/2024 1:57:00 PM
Tom, AGAIN you've proven that you are a master storyteller! This is an excellent narrative in every respect. Janice
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Date: 5/8/2024 12:26:00 AM
Thank you very much Janice, I'm happy you enjoyed the story. Tom
Date: 5/3/2024 3:11:00 PM
Wonderful Narrative poetry, Tom. Thanks for sharing your exciting experience with us through your poetry, my friend. I thoroughly enjoyed the story and as always with your writing, very engaging. Have a great day! Cheers, Bill
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Date: 5/3/2024 10:55:00 PM
Thank you very much Bill, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I hope you are keeping well. Have a lovely weekend. Tom
Date: 5/2/2024 11:12:00 AM
Tom, I just love your stories and this one is excellent with its mystical, other worldly, plot! So creative. This one would make a great movie as you time travel. Makes me wonder what happened to the doctor and his family. Hope you are well! Over Fork Over. Blessings!
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Date: 5/2/2024 2:13:00 PM
Thank you very much Sam, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story. I wrote it a couple of weeks ago when I was in Crete, I can't just sit in the sunshine, I get bored easily so came up with this one, it was an episode of Star Trek that inspired it. Home now but itching to travel again. I'm keeping well and I hope you are too. Over Fork Over. Tom Tom
Date: 5/2/2024 4:33:00 AM
Master storytelling Tom! I thoroughly enjoyed every word! You really are terrific at this! Happy Thursday!!
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Date: 5/2/2024 5:21:00 AM
Thank you very much Mike, I'm happy you enjoyed it. Hope you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 5/1/2024 10:52:00 AM
Ha, ha. You are the 'hit man,' Tom. Just a whack on the head and off you go on another adventure. Thoroughly enjoyable, Mr. 1856. Thanks, Gershon
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Date: 5/1/2024 10:58:00 AM
Thank you very much for your return visit Gershon, I've had many a knock to the head, managed to split my head open riding a pushbike when I was young I saw stars lol. Tom
Date: 4/30/2024 5:43:00 AM
My Goodness. Hello Tom. Is there no end to your writing ability. I feel privileged to have turned to your page and entry this morning. You have the ability to draw us in from the beginning to its entirety. With your vividness and coherence we are all in the scene looking on. And yes, with the ending you leave us reader to pause. You and your writing are extraordinary. Truly. May this day find you well. Peace and Blessings now and always. (smile)
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Date: 4/30/2024 10:52:00 AM
Thank you very much Lisa, I hope you are keeping well. Haven't been on much of late as I've been travelling again. I started writing this on the beach in Crete under an umbrella, don't like too much sun. I'm happy you enjoyed the story. Tom
Date: 4/29/2024 1:11:00 PM
Dear Tom, inspiring poet, your gift for rhymes and story-telling can't help but captivate one's intellect and imagination. I completely enjoyed this intriguing poem and adore your last line.. I say you entered a parallel world.. Such a splendid surreal piece! Congratulations for your win in Tom's contest. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/29/2024 10:16:00 PM
Thank you very much Susan, I wrote it whilst I was in Crete and Andrea asked was it for a contest, so had a look and thought why not. I'm happy that you enjoyed it. I'm not long back from my travels, trouble walking grounded me but after my op, there's no stopping me. I hope that you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 4/29/2024 9:04:00 AM
You are the master storyteller. Seems so real. Always a great ending. I wish you would write more. "Please" Have a fun day writing away.....................
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Date: 4/29/2024 9:13:00 AM
Thank you very much Paula, I'm happy you enjoyed the story. I'm not long back from travelling. I hope you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 4/28/2024 6:12:00 PM
Wow when it comes to a great story,I'm all ears. I was gripped by the intrigue from beginning to end Tom. Masterfully written, though do tell, when you came to was it a sense of relief you felt, or a slight regret? I do believe that we all live different lives in parallel dimensions. ...Hugs
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Date: 4/28/2024 11:32:00 PM
Thank you very much Maria, I'm happy you enjoyed it. I love all that paranormal stuff, it fascinates me. There's an awful lot going on that has yet to be discovered. Stephen King's 'The Mist' is another favourite of mine. It was an episode of Star Trek that inspired this one. Enjoy your week ahead. Tom
Date: 4/28/2024 12:58:00 PM
I really didn't think this was yours though the writing style certainly was a clue, only because I didn't think you would ever enter one of my contests. That having been said, yours was the best story of the lot (which is your special talent) and would have placed high in the twilight zone contest. Even still, though light on surrealistic imagery the hint of a parallel world made it way worthy. Nice job Tom
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Date: 5/1/2024 10:55:00 AM
I'll look out for that one, live long and prosper.
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Date: 4/29/2024 5:09:00 AM
I watched the first season. Very disappointed, didn't feel like Star Trek. Ditto with Discovery. Now Strange New Worlds is more like it!
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Date: 4/28/2024 11:33:00 PM
Picard is a series I want to see, read that the flute or piccolo makes an appearance.
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Date: 4/28/2024 1:09:00 PM
Ahhh one of the best of the best! Stewart was so good in that one. Then there was that awesome flute (or was it a piccolo?)
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Date: 4/28/2024 1:06:00 PM
Thank you very much Tom, I'm happy you enjoyed it, thanks too for my placement and for hosting. Was on holiday and an episode of Star Trek came to mind, The Inner Light and that was the inspiration for it. Tom
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