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The moon dances on lonely nights, to astral beams of the clear quartz milky way~ I lay in an olive meadow designed in fragrant promises, hidden between thorns and thistles disguised as fields of ferns. Inhaling life, exhaling pain, as the Universe unravels a cosmic shadow that follows hail storms brewing in my mind. Whilst Vanilla butterfly snowflakes swirl in solitude through dark December nights, drizzling shooting stars upon my poetic heart. reminding me that there’s always pastel colored sunsets waiting to smear forsaken skies in feigned wishes and mistletoe kisses, that last as long as inconsistent seasonal hollow gusts, thawing glaciers on icy tips of my fragile fingers, with fleeting flames quilting lilac lavenders into a blanket of happiness. But weary winds can pierce through the strongest of roots, and I always knew I was on my own~ an empress without an emperor in an empire of raging tempests. Although, nightingales sing soothing serenades, oblivious to the sinister sun that lacks empathy, enshrouding my grieving spine with scorching thick threads of electric heat, feeding life above the emerald waves of time, there’s no antidote left in my empty sphere of familiar faces, with frosty chivalrous smiles, I’ve walked through frozen miles, cloaked in sparkling silence, where hopes and faith died, like ephemeral colors of northern lights, within the tilted stage of my tainted black and white soul, releasing a wounded sigh. So, don’t question my invisible wand with pixie-dust, that wipes away every murky cloud, enveloped in hazy unjust; I deserve more than this pantomime of pretend, of decayed trust, where wooded trees stand empty, with rosy lies scribbled in blood, from envious pens and sharpened nails, full of ferocious fire on forgotten trunks..

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Date: 4/9/2024 12:51:00 AM
Hi Ink Empress, I have returned to compliment you on your first medal selection with this invigorating piece. It has left an indelible mark on me Warm regards Howard
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Ink Empress
Date: 4/11/2024 8:23:00 AM
Thank you so very much so very kind of you im so grateful for your support and for your well wishes
Date: 4/8/2024 6:03:00 PM
Striking imagery throughout your magnificent poem, Inky. "I lay in an olive meadow designed in fragrant promises, hidden between thorns and thistles disguised as fields of ferns. Inhaling life, exhaling pain"...Wow, I love that line! Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 4/11/2024 8:24:00 AM
Dear EI im always so grrateful for your generosity and for your deep analysis and understanding of my poems, thank you so very much for placing my poem high, im beyond thankful
Date: 4/8/2024 5:54:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win dear Ink.
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Date: 4/11/2024 8:24:00 AM
Awwn thank you sweet soul truly
Date: 3/31/2024 2:31:00 AM
Dear Ink Empress, I have been completely overwhelmed by this monumental, majestic, magnificent work. Glistening adjectives, platinum word choice, arrays of exquisite light and shade inhabit your poetic canvass. Your Wounded Sigh is etched in vivid visuals and intense feeling. Best of luck with this in contest. For someone of your stature to complement my work is an accolade. Heartfelt thanks Howard
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Date: 3/30/2024 10:35:00 PM
To be able to see past the dark cliuds that cause your mind to be forgetful of the beautiful copeful sunrises of hopeful capes to sail, is next to divine. To be be a Poet who can convey and sell the notion's pour over sheer cliffs of feeling truths, with a pen like an "invisible wand" dipped in hearts rosy blooded ink of contrivity, infinity divided by the sublime. A FAVOR RITE dear Ink Empress ed
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Date: 3/29/2024 11:05:00 AM
IE, you have a way to express pain with such extravagant melancholy. I had to read this several times to take in the detail of each painful reminder. No one can take away such pain but you...and it will take courage. I believe many of us would like to help if we can....but much of what we have is just pixie dust. I have often felt that there were likely many people I could relate to..there's no match made in heaven--just work here to find our dreams and make them work by learning from the past.
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Date: 3/29/2024 8:48:00 AM
I can sense the depth of the wound you feel in your heart. All the images used are striking and some of the lines cut deep into the soul like a sharp rapier. "I’ve walked through frozen miles, cloaked in sparkling silence, where hopes and faith died, like ephemeral colors of northern lights, within the tilted stage of my tainted black and white soul, releasing a wounded sigh." Wow.... so deep, unmatched in poignancy and pathos. Again another set of striking lines that echo like a rising lament...."I always knew I was on my own~ an empress without an emperor in an empire of raging tempests." I'm dumbfounded! Into my FAVE
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Date: 3/29/2024 3:50:00 AM
I love the imagery, the emotions, the metaphors and all the feelings infused purely in it. As always you have creatively and evocatively narrated a piece with wounded stems. "and I always knew I was on my own~ an empress without an emperor in an empire of raging tempests." My favourite line here. It's okay to be alone than to be flooded with the wrong people. Great one dear Ink.
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:04:00 AM
awn dear tonye, you are a very talented poet too and I absolutely love reading your work. Im so honored and grateful to receive your kind and thoughtful comments truly! Sending you light always
Date: 3/29/2024 2:29:00 AM
lay in an olive meadow designed in fragrant promises,hidden between thorns and thistles… I love how u can bring heaviness to a piece so elegantly papi.. drizzling shooting stars upon my poetic heart… mmm thawing glaciers on icy tips of my fragile fingers, with fleeting flames quilting lilac lavenders into a blanket of happiness… ooo dreamy imagery !! I deserve more than this pantomime of pretend,of decayed trust,.. amen!!! Yess rosy lies scribbled in blood, gorgeously said! Beautiful piece papi
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:05:00 AM
Papi thank u
Date: 3/28/2024 6:37:00 PM
"lies scribbled in blood, from envious pens and sharpened nails, full of ferocious fire on forgotten trunks.. - "enshrouding my grieving spine with scorching thick threads of electric heat"- Wow, I absolutely love this, it's going in my favs
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:05:00 AM
Awwn thank you so much its alwYs an honor to hear from you i am so very grateful for your favs and also your poetic presence truly! Sending you light always
Date: 3/28/2024 4:01:00 PM
I always love your imagery! It's so exquisite and beautifully constructed in this poem. I felt twinges of sadness and lost hope and wish you weren't experiencing these intense emotions. Know we (hubby and I) care. I especially liked: I deserve more than this pantomime of pretend, Your eloquence makes this poem outstanding and a great contest contender. Hugs for the evening, Sara
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:07:00 AM
Aww that is so sweet of you, to say, thank you , i appreciate you and your hubby my fave poetic couple
Date: 3/28/2024 3:55:00 PM
Ink, I really do admire your impressive writing ability.Your poem, tinged with sadness, also has eloquence and beauty. All good wishes, Evelyn
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:15:00 AM
Awn thank you dear Evelyn
Date: 3/28/2024 3:30:00 PM
Your imagery, filled with colors and emotions are exquisite, Empress. You are amazing to bare your soul through your poetry, my dear friend. It saddens me to feel your pain and sometimes seemingly loss of hope. As we age all things become more intense at the deeper levels of life. Know there are always people like Sara and me, that think good thoughts about you and send out our light to help you through the darkness. I think your poem will do well, good luck! Your poet friend in Texas, BB
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:24:00 AM
This is such a thoughtful comment realy, im so grateful for your support, you and sara are special and are my fave poetic couple. I appreciate the fave and also comment truly thank y so very much
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Date: 3/28/2024 3:31:00 PM
p.s. I forgot to mention that I added this one to my FAVs list. :-) Bill
Date: 3/28/2024 1:44:00 PM
Empress. A Fave for its passion, power, courage to truth, language, mastery, AND receipt of Inspiration! I also want to add this reinforces my belief in the Now influence of the collective unconscious…i just complete my poem coining Vanilla, reference to storms & light! Yikes Anyway, Applause here & Fabulouspen! sally
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:30:00 AM
Its been so long! Thank you so much dear sweet sally, i am grateful for your support
Date: 3/28/2024 12:18:00 PM
Dear Ink, your poem is truly remarkable and filled with depth. I admire the way you use imagery and articulate expression to convey the experience of pain and longing with honesty. It feels as though you have exposed your innermost self to the world. I sense a profound sense of sorrow in your words. ---I have journeyed through desolate landscapes, enveloped in a quiet beauty, where my hopes and faith faded away, like fleeting shades of the aurora borealis.
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:38:00 AM
So grateful to have you back dr sotto thank you so much truly
Date: 3/28/2024 12:01:00 PM
Dear Empress, Okay, I just loved how your imagery and eloquent expression as it encapsulates the journey through pain and longing with such raw honesty. In many ways, it's as if you peeled back the layers of your soul and laid them bare for the world to see. Your words spoke to the depths of our own struggles and showed us that amidst the storms of life, there is still beauty and resilience to be found. Empress this is such a journey illuminating the path of healing through poetic grace. A Fav for sure! - Blessings, my, friend, Daniel
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:38:00 AM
Awwn thank you for the fave and blessings dear daniel, im so happy to receive your thoughtful and kind feedback truly
Date: 3/28/2024 11:55:00 AM
I hear the cry of wounded sigh throughout, my friend. ---I’ve walked through frozen miles, cloaked in sparkling silence, where hopes and faith died, like ephemeral colors of northern lights---I deserve more than this pantomime of pretend, of decayed trust--splendidly emotive response to the prompt, Ink.
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:39:00 AM
Im always grateful for your kind and generous support dear Vijay thank you so very much truly
Date: 3/28/2024 11:34:00 AM
The moon really do dance on lonely nights . The first line took me back to some time when the moon danced to me . Beautiful poem .
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:39:00 AM
Awwn thank u dahlin always
Date: 3/28/2024 11:10:00 AM
I've released many a wounded sigh and I can feel the angst in your words.. Your poem beautifully captures the interplay between the celestial and the personal, weaving together themes of loneliness, resilience, and the cyclical nature of life's challenges.. The use of natural elements such as the olive meadow, thorns, and ferns adds layers of texture to the poem, grounding it in the tangible world while also hinting at the hidden complexities of human emotion.
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:40:00 AM
How beautiful and deep is your comment. You really have a great understanding of metaphors etc and im honored to receive your thoughtful feedback that makes my heart warm. Thank u so much
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Date: 3/28/2024 11:11:00 AM
The metaphor of the 'Vanilla butterfly snowflakes' and 'pastel-coloured sunsets' beautifully captures the fleeting moments of joy and hope amidst life's challenges... Your poem is a testament to the resilience of the human spirit, reminding us of the beauty that can be found even in the darkest of nights. It's a poem that invites reflection on the cyclical nature of life's challenges and the enduring power of hope.
Date: 3/28/2024 11:09:00 AM
my first thought about your poem was what Khalil Gibran said about love "If love finds you worthy it will find you"
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Date: 3/29/2024 4:41:00 AM
Awwn i love khalil gibran. Thank you dear frederick. Based on old feelings. I do have a very sweet beloved haha

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