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on the edge of sleep

Whimsy flowers On the edge of sleep Mirage-like echoes Singing off key Arias Challenge The closing curtain Whispers Hidden In the dusk Of dreams Dance In the vapory mist Of sleep’s Oasis.

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Michelle Faulkner

Date: 5/6/2024 8:31:00 PM

Wow this is so lovely, brings the feeling of waiting for the curtain of sleep to drop~

Silent One

Date: 5/5/2024 9:01:00 AM

I've just recently got back to my normal sleeping pattern.. I feel your words..

John Lawless
Date: 5/5/2024 7:07:00 PM

sleep tight SO, let the REM dance begin

Lin Lane

Date: 5/5/2024 6:36:00 AM

Each line is written with a purpose, building to the fruition of your title. "In the vapory mist Of sleep’s Oasis." Dynamic is the word I'd use as long as it doesn't disturb you on the edge of falling asleep.

John Lawless
Date: 5/5/2024 7:06:00 PM

I prefer wholly organic, cage free, free range comments released from the captivity of the "box"

Lin Lane
Date: 5/5/2024 7:35:00 AM

An afterthought... I sometimes wonder if you think my comments on your poetry would be better left inside the box.