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Like a Tree In the Desert

Prick me with your vivid green awareness Let the white pins that needle me Diminish into their foggy sham The bridal wreath that scented our commitment Now doused in unkept hopes and promises Moss sprouting venom from hurts battled Like a fish floating in space with no oxygen I swam in currents without you The tank occupied with endless dark clouds Fraught with fear and loneliness Love now submerged deep in the recess of my mind Unclear what is sacred what is trash I prayed you would see the light That my white knight would return This battle is fierce and yours to fight

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2017 6:41:00 PM

I see you got poem of the day with this amazing one. Congrats, dear.

Carol B.
Date: 10/31/2017 8:18:00 AM

Thanks! :)

Ralph Sergi

Date: 10/24/2017 6:22:00 PM

Hi Carol: You expounded the plight of most damsels in a very profound dilemma.! My compliments!

Carol B.
Date: 10/31/2017 8:19:00 AM

Thank you! :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/1/2017 6:33:00 PM

I love the metaphors in this lovely piece Carol. Congratulations on POTD! : )

Carol B.
Date: 10/8/2017 9:18:00 PM

Thanks! :)

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/29/2017 3:47:00 PM

Sad, deep and dark. Yet so compelling to read and ponder the tragic circumstances.. Great poetry my friend!

Carol B.
Date: 10/8/2017 9:18:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Silent One

Date: 9/22/2017 1:02:00 PM

Very deep write..

Carol B.
Date: 9/23/2017 11:25:00 AM

Thanks!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/10/2017 1:48:00 AM

What an amazing write, Carol. Congrats on POTD. Commitment takes nurture and it's sometimes easy to let things become mundane in a long standing relationship. Thanks for the reminder to show love to those deserving of love.

Carol B.
Date: 11/7/2017 1:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Eileen! :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/7/2017 6:16:00 PM

So deserving, congratulations. An amazing write, very impressive.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:31:00 PM

Thank you from the bottom of my heart! :)

Eve Roper

Date: 9/7/2017 5:28:00 PM

Great imagery , Carol, congratulations on POTD... Hugs Eve ~`*

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:33:00 PM

Thanks! :)

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/7/2017 2:59:00 PM

Hello Carole!! Congratulations on POTD!!This is indeed a quite lovely poem for sure. The last Tercet stanza says it all. Superb write. Best Wishes, Gary

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:34:00 PM

Thank you! Happy you like the poem Gary. :)

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 9/7/2017 2:23:00 PM

Lovely poem here Carol! Congratulations

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:34:00 PM

Thanks!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/7/2017 11:39:00 AM

- Back to congratulate you, Carol !!! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:35:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 9/7/2017 9:47:00 AM

Very unusual concept. Congratulations.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:36:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/7/2017 8:23:00 AM

Hi Carol, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on getting the poem of day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:37:00 PM

Thanks! :)

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/7/2017 8:14:00 AM

Congrats!!! Carol...POTD...yahooo!...^WW^

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:37:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 9/7/2017 6:51:00 AM

Your imagery is amazing! Congrats on POTD.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:38:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2017 5:51:00 PM

wow, Carol. this is very powerful writing and I love your imagery. one of your best!

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:39:00 PM

Andrea, I am so happy you liked my poem and imagery. :)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 9/6/2017 12:36:00 PM

Very deep emotional poem that pierces the heart, Carol! Your pen sword slays. Excellent free verse poetry. Love and joy always.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:40:00 PM

Freddie, Thanks so much for dropping by and commenting on my poem. :)

Silent One

Date: 9/6/2017 8:51:00 AM

This is very well written Carol..

Carol B.
Date: 9/6/2017 10:29:00 AM

Thanks! :)

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/6/2017 8:11:00 AM

When an artist is told his work is gloomy He thanks the person for having an emotion. I feel that way its your poignant poem, Carol!

Carol B.
Date: 9/6/2017 10:32:00 AM

Ralph, Thanks so much for the wonderful compliment! :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/5/2017 11:25:00 PM

Hi Carol, I agree with them below, this is a dark AND powerful write. Good ending to a well written piece. Thanks for visiting me today:-) Alexis

Carol B.
Date: 9/6/2017 10:32:00 AM

Thanks! :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/5/2017 7:13:00 PM

Only love can conquer, and it needs to be unconditional love. Brilliant Carol! : )

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:41:00 PM

Connie, I so agree with your comment. :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/5/2017 4:54:00 PM

I feel the emotion in this one..I hope just a work and not life..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:45:00 PM

Sara, Thanks so much for your lovely comment. It's not pertaining to my life. However, I have witnessed this happen to someone I love.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/5/2017 3:04:00 PM

- I feel this as the struggle between good and evil ... and not least the great choices in life - A wonderful poem, Carol - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:45:00 PM

Thanks for the wonderful comment. :)

Tim Smith

Date: 9/5/2017 1:17:00 PM

Awesome, love the imagery...a fav

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:46:00 PM

Thanks! :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/5/2017 1:08:00 PM

Brilliant! Leaves me speechless. A Huge Fav for me. An impeccable inspired write.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 1:47:00 PM

Thanks for the amazing compliment! :)