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Written: May 05, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You crossed the gloss, Under a star-spangled sky, To greet me at dawn. Foggy dreams awoke me, my brain was amort, I sense your whisper, I immediately drew it. While in the woods, birds sang, leaving darkness behind, the haze-modified hues,  would dance with the sun.  I'll acknowledge, I am mesmerized by singing, and my senses were enhanced.  Yet, in extending them, I may endanger your soul, I created a human ghost, It is unknown what will occur. Love beckons you, Although it seems pointless,  I can't bear my dream, While on the verge, There is plenty to consider.  Often ambiguous, Vague atmosphere, It almost feels as "déjà vu".  Unreal is magnificent, I can't break this magic spell, It lurks near to life, Some believe it is a vision, Which detects every sign. Realistic hyperbole,  for heartfelt times.
 

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Date: 5/7/2024 11:03:00 AM
Made this a favorite. It's truly a remarkable poem. I find it incredible each time I read it.
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Date: 5/7/2024 7:30:00 AM
Interesting lines penned in this one. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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Date: 5/6/2024 10:57:00 PM
I enjoyed this poem every much, xoxo peace and love
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Date: 5/6/2024 11:50:00 AM
A magic spell conjures visions of fantasy. Yet the human element is there under its metaphoric verse. Great contrasts enhance the emotions, with perfect imagery. Great lines.
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Date: 5/6/2024 6:57:00 AM
Hello Sotto, Your poem unfolds like a dream, blending and turning with raw emotion. I loved the interplay between light and shadow; dreams and reality create a captivating atmosphere. Your poetic words dance with uncertainty and longing, leaving an indelible imprint on the soul. Bravo Sotto for crafting such a mesmerizing piece. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 5/6/2024 5:42:00 AM
Wonderfully reminiscing in love--dream or not--splendidly done, my friend. ---You crossed the gloss, Under a star-spangled sky, To greet me at dawn. Foggy dreams awoke me--- reveries brought to fore in lovesome diction!
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Date: 5/6/2024 4:37:00 AM
Ah dr sotto, this is absolutely stunning and so well woven, i love the way youv written in such a descriptive manner, with such creative and artistic diction! I love the way you paint imagery and use metaphors, and how you pair words is so ethereal! I especially love “ Under a star-spangled sky, To greet me at dawn. Foggy dreams awoke me,“ gorgeous and seamless alliterations! “It almost feels as "déjà vu". Unreal is magnificent, I can't break this magic spell,“ so beautiful and soulfully divine! Pleasure always reading your work! Best wishes
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Date: 5/5/2024 7:11:00 PM
SP, I agree with your line 4th from the end that this is a description of a vision. Our minds do some pretty interesting things. You capture so much of what I think would be a vision. The interesting thing about a vision is that once we understand what it is, it may fade away. I don't think many people have really had a vision...at least not many talk about it for fear of being thought of as ill, but I can tell you that your description is accurate. I would be happy to provide more information on this subject if you are interested. However based on your poem, I suspect you are an expert already!
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Date: 5/5/2024 4:35:00 PM
title was ideally suited for your poem, a poem filled with a sense of wonder--that sense of "déjà vu" and ambiguity ( I loved the captivating opening lines: You crossed the gloss, Under a star-spangled sky,To greet me at dawn." Those words hinted of romance in a mystical, magical place. The ending, "I don't want to break this magic spell..." How many times in my life have I not wanted to break the magic spell? Many. A thought provoking read. Have a pleasant evening, your poetess friend, Sara
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Date: 5/5/2024 12:32:00 PM
Hey Sotto your poem encapsulates a journey through dreams and reality, weaving together imagery of nature and emotion in a captivating narrative. The opening lines, "You crossed the gloss, Under a star-spangled sky, To greet me at dawn," immediately set a scene of intimacy and connection beneath a celestial backdrop. The final lines, with their reference to "déjà vu" and "unreal magnificent" experiences, leave soupers with a sense of wonder and ambiguity, inviting interpretation and reflection
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