get to my place get lost

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Poetic Form: Tanka
Inspired: 2024 May 04
Image: N/A

trip yourself my way no siesta at borders cross right for a swim until you're breathless and lost to my words~first to my place

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/5/2024 4:26:00 PM

the first line of your Tanka was an unusual way to lead into your poem. No siesta at borders? Hmmm

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/5/2024 5:51:00 PM

The trip, I first implied, as an inference to travel abroad, and/or, as an inference to falling--in this case--towards Mexico in anticipation with Line 2, No siesta is an anticipation with lines 3 & 4 as it implies, no time for idle chit-chat/small talk as it infers prepping for a lengthy breathless swim ... priorities/other sites prefer blunt/raw o'er flowery or do--loss for words-Aloha, William

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 5/5/2024 3:41:00 AM

Loved it with shades of romance.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/5/2024 4:06:00 AM

Yes, Victor, a PC society, that's age-friendly, with TPS saying Adios. I say, Aloha, my age-friendly friend, William