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Fish Party

Each goldfish is like a birthday candle: fins flickering in under-water sparkles of sunlit sugar. Sprinkled, trickled, rippled. My face is staring over the pond; they gather for party bags we call stinky-fish-food, while cloud-balloons make funny faces and float far away.

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Date: 5/16/2024 8:00:00 AM
i love that image of a goldfish 'like a birthday candle of flickering fins', also the subtle alliteration and playful language; i do enjoy your work, it's unique and quirky
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 5/16/2024 3:36:00 PM
Thank you fellow word-smith. J :)
Date: 5/9/2024 2:47:00 PM
such an imaginative and creative poem, Jeanette. Comparing goldfish to birthday candles was brilliant. I admire your originality with this one. Have a splendid evening, hugs, Sara
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 5/14/2024 4:48:00 AM
Thanks Sara, lots of goldies in the pond (husband's hobby), and the grandkids like feeding them. J :)

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