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1/18/2011 6:05:51 PM
Sabreen Wolf Posts: 2
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This isn't finished, but I would like to know what you think so far. Thank You, Sabreen
Lost Forever and Ever More
Once upon a life so dreary My heart and soul now oh so weary Feeling lost and torn forever Like a ghost I live no more Lost forever and ever more. Memories fill my heart with sorrow Although I beg and try to borrow Any tiny bit of hope that Tomorrow I will cry no more Hope lost forever and ever more. Love and Life seem oh so fleeting Sometimes I feel I must be dreaming To have this tangled web of feelings That I have never felt before Love lost forever and ever more. Surely there must be a reason For committing such a treason Especially in so late a season The seasons that my face now shows Time lost forever and ever more.
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