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8/29/2012 7:06:49 PM cory long Posts: 10	Thoughts build up in your mind. Will it be different this time? Standing at the devils gate. You take a step closer to fate. Scared and wanting to run You stare your demons down. Knowing the only way to change Is to look pass the mistakes. Guilt can hold you captive inside While making you want to cry. Hope fights through the clouds that Fogs your perception of life Strength gives you the courage to fight for what you want And love is what your friends are for when things get tough.
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8/30/2012 12:26:15 PM Aron Jacob Posts: 12	A couple typos, I think: "Look pass" should be "look past" "Fogs your perception" should be "fog your perception" to match with the plural "clouds"
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