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and time seems to still into a whirlwind of colors or maybe it's just you You shine so maybe for today repeated each crumpling brown leaf will be eyed as a blossom don't I deserve this deception don't We? and each color seems to swirl an array of art so abstract no hunter could pinpoint You to a frame Your movements a dance the song of the wind Your gentle smile beckons Me who wouldn't fall and even if the drop kills Me I'd do it again for no hell could unleash wrath greater than not knowing You Your smile You Your eyes You and maybe for today repeated I'll let Myself believe that fate is My companion that fate made Me a boy

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Date: 5/27/2024 11:14:00 AM
This is an interesting form. I love how you have created such strong emotions. Congratulations! :)
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Date: 5/27/2024 9:40:00 AM
Dear Susie, I adore how your title is incorporated into the first verse. Your poetic introspection is nuanced with conflicting emotion, colored with creative imagery and evocative metaphor while coaxing my heart's imagination with subtle yet insistent questioning. A thought-provoking, intimate and superb piece. Congratulations for your win in Charlotte's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/27/2024 5:06:00 AM
something about this stood out for me, and grew on me with repeated readings..i like the second and third stanzas particularly, and i love that ending (i always look closely at the ending) congrats on your win in my contest!
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