While in Nature

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Written: December 18, 2023 ____________________________________________ Squared to wind down and calm. Straight spine and poised shoulders. scarlet heart through high cost. A poem flows through sighs That sight was ne'er seen lost. Squared to wind down and calm. freedom shown through sound cues. A grey squirrel up high Winter plans have started without e'er asking why. Squared to wind down and calm. lone wasp creeps o'er the floor. through a feathery fern. stir up sleek feathered leaves. to favor my return. Squared to wind down and calm. time seems to slip away. Joy, pain merge into one. Once flash, Once a lifetime. Once with the serene sun.

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Paige Hind

Date: 12/20/2023 5:38:00 PM

I LOVE the last few lines, and rhyme of this piece, so haunting, and draws you in, like a gift to unwrap. :)

Ink Empress

Date: 12/19/2023 11:45:00 AM

This is such a profound and meaningful one that depicts life and experiences in such an eloquent manner using this form, whichever form you do dr sotto you always seem to nail it and deliver such intriguing truths that one would ponder and resonate with “ Squared to wind down and calm.time seems to slip away. Joy, pain merge into one.Once flash, Once a lifetime.Once with the serene sun.” This hits home for me and lately i have been thinking the same. Pleasure reading this one! Sending you light

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/19/2023 5:36:00 AM

Splendid images in this lovely form my friend. Your pen is on fire crafting these beauties.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/18/2023 9:37:00 PM

Lasaad, your descriptive poem conveys an expressive message about the subtle coming of winter. Janice

Mat Ignacio

Date: 12/18/2023 7:25:00 PM

poetic, almost musical - 'stir up sleek feathered leaves,' beauty of an image here

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/18/2023 2:02:00 PM

dear Sotto-I was drawn to the deep, introspective nature of your poem. Seems as if nature inspired the narrator giving him pause as he compared his life and time to that of a squirrel and a lone wasp. These words were profound: "time seems to slip away...joy, pain, merge into one..." How often that is true! Wise and insightful words that gave me much to ponder this afternoon. Have a great evening; Merry Christmas from Bill & I, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Christina Bowring

Date: 12/18/2023 1:56:00 PM

This is a new, stanza form to me dear Sotto, but with your immense, creative, skilled pen, I know you have done it justice. So beautifully, artistically written with great depth of reflective thoughts. Very inspiring. So much to learn from you. Thank you for sharing as always. Your talent is boundless. Wishing you a truly lovely Christmas with many blessings.

Deb M

Date: 12/18/2023 12:35:00 PM

Aww lovely imagery in this delightful poem! Lasaad….Debx

Silent One

Date: 12/18/2023 12:29:00 PM

Your poem is a captivating journey through serene moments and introspective reflections... The repetition of 'Squared to wind down and calm' creates a rhythmic structure that adds to the soothing atmosphere. The vivid imagery of a scarlet heart, a lone wasp, and sleek feathered leaves paints a vivid picture. The juxtaposition of joy and pain merging into one is particularly poignant. Overall, a wonderfully evocative piece that resonates with tranquillity and contemplation.