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When Silence Speaks

"When Silence Speaks" poetry contest. Sponsor: Craig Cornish 2nd Place. Date Submitted: 07/05/2024 the air conditioner soothing my heated skin fire brick curtains with their red dyed orange bumblebee rays peeking through gaps in between, they have so much to say so much to say to me ghosts of muffled laughter snuggling my ears crinkled edges of faded eyes and scratchy rugs beneath my feet labored breaths running after a face resembling my own, your lingering warmth has so much to say so much to say to me a hand in mine and a skip in my step wandering, marveling at street vendors, the bustling market lavender dreams blooming under our eyelids, that quiet understanding has so much to say so much to say to me heaving shoulders in a dimly lit bathroom, tear tracks melding into the glass of a splintered mirror this lonely silence has howled its piece, now I have nothing to say nothing to say to me.

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Daniel Caplin

Date: 5/18/2024 12:48:00 AM

Good Morning, and thanks for commenting on my poem "I Am Time" your poem is such a beautifully written poem , and absolutely deserving of your win , many congratulations, as I read it, it took me back to my schooldays and reminded me of one of my favourite poems A Mirror in February by Thomas Kinsella, anyway a really wonderful poem . Danny

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/18/2024 3:14:00 AM

Ah thank you so very much Danny! it is a pleasure having you here. I will make sure to give A Mirror in February a read. Much Blessings.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 5/16/2024 7:47:00 AM

an excellent poem; vivid images with just the right amount of descriptive language, great word combos, and i like how you've ended each stanza with the call and echo effect - congrats on your well deserved win in craig's contest, and thanks for your inspiring comment today on my poem :)

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/16/2024 8:33:00 AM

Thank you so very much Charlotte <33 I am honored to have you visit my page.

Matt Caliri

Date: 5/13/2024 5:22:00 PM

Love your style. Fantastic descriptive writing with a satisfying "call back" with the refrain of "something to say" then opposingly "nothing to say." And easy ride of a read with a wonderfully tight structure.

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/13/2024 11:35:00 PM

Thanks so much for sharing your invaluable thoughts. Much Blessings <3333

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/13/2024 2:48:00 PM

Interesting winner. Congratulations. Sara K

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/13/2024 11:35:00 PM

Thank you! <3

Mark Massey

Date: 5/12/2024 5:57:00 AM

This is haunting. Well done Hiba. Congrats as well

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/12/2024 7:02:00 AM

Thanks so much! <33

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/11/2024 7:53:00 PM

The poem is superb because it makes the reader reflect on their feelings and reminisce about other times. A deep sensation of solitude and quietness is the result. Nostalgia, desire, loneliness, and connection are some of the topics explored in the poem. Some examples of phrases that elicit sensual feelings include "fire brick curtains," "bumblebee rays," and "lavender dreams." Congratulations on your win!

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/11/2024 11:39:00 PM

Thank you so, so very much!!!!!! for taking the time out to write a comment and such a motivating one at that. I really appreciate it <333

Ink Empress

Date: 5/10/2024 1:01:00 AM

Now i have nothing to say, what a line to end this heart touching and moving writ that flows with such creative lines. I felt so much reading this, the angst and suppressed thoughts as well as the longing, for so much more. I especially loved the lines “ lavender dreams blooming under our eyelids,” “ ghosts of muffled laughter snuggling my ears crinkled edges of faded eyes and scratchy rugs beneath my feet“ you have a very descriptive way with words dear hiba! Pleasure reading this! Best wishes

Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/10/2024 2:08:00 AM

I am so moved by your kind and encouraging comment. I am glad that you were touched by my words - it is the greatest compliment. Be Blessed.