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When I Was Young

When I was young and life was easy I never thought but of the next day. For the young, things can be so breezy It is the child's way. I never thought but of the next day Until that day came upon me. It is the child's way And I did not want to see. Until that day came upon me I was carefree like the bird on high. And I did not want to see The dark adult horizons that would make me cry. I was carefree like the bird on high Only to be trapped by love The dark adult horizons that would make me cry Crushing me down from above. Only to be trapped by love For the young, things can be so breezy Crushing me down from above When I was young and life was easy. Dan Cwiak ... written for: Paula Swanson's Pantoum contest

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Date: 12/14/2010 12:37:00 AM
Many congrats Daniel on winning coveted spot in Paulas Pantoum contest with this beautiful write. Luv/best wishes........Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 12/13/2010 11:29:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Dan in Paula's Pantoum contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/13/2010 5:14:00 AM
Oh, this is so true, is it not. Very good writing; I was carried along throughout this whole poem, remembering what it was like 'when I was young and life was easy'. Congratulations on your win in the pantoum contest.
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Date: 12/12/2010 12:45:00 PM
Congratulations on your well-deserved win in Paula's contest, Daniel! Truly enjoyed reading this! Love, Audrey
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Date: 12/12/2010 11:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest..
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Date: 12/12/2010 8:35:00 AM
Happy to see your poem in the winners' circle, Daniel. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 12/12/2010 7:24:00 AM
Congrats Dan on your winning poem in Paula's Pantoum contest with this wonderful write and win my friend.. enjoy another top ten victory with luv..
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Date: 12/12/2010 5:50:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest of Paula, Daniel
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Date: 11/23/2010 11:18:00 AM
Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry today Dan. I wish you a very Happy Thanksgiving if you observe the holiday. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/22/2010 9:48:00 PM
Exception write, Daniel! I love this insightful write. Good luck in Paula's Contest..I have to hurry as I'm still working on mine. This goes to my favorite today. Love, Audrey
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Date: 11/22/2010 5:00:00 PM
Outstanding pantoum, Daniel!! Live is a learning experience that sometimes takes us from innocense to cynicism. How I wish we could continue to soar through life like birds on high. A very realistic look at life, my friend. Best wishes in Paula's contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/22/2010 4:31:00 PM
Please give once over to the last quatrain for sapelling. Its a perfect pantoum. Good luck in the contest, Daniel
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Date: 11/22/2010 4:27:00 PM
Good luck in the contest with this fine Pantoum..Youth up to a certain age is so carefree for sure...Sara
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Date: 11/22/2010 4:25:00 PM
Hello, Daniel,, enjoyed your poem,, and th bst of luck in the contest,..p.d.
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