Untold

Incalculable sheets of thoughts hidden Boiling brain,mimicking sharp gnawing pain Pretty soul lay there quite sick, bed ridden Entrapped by deep surges of bloody bane Her stamina, sleekly started to wane Stepped in, her beloved from a far land He sat beside sobbing and picked her hand Stroking it gently, enquired the reason She lay still, with expression being bland Untold she croaked, in bleak winter season Aug10, 2020 First Place in the Contest:-) Note:Pick-A-Title, vol 21,Dizain Poetry Contest. Title chosen:1)UNTOLD Checked syllables:Howmanysyllables.com Sponsored by Edward Ibeh.

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Carol Louise Moon

Date: 8/26/2020 7:24:00 AM

What an amazing story and amazing poem. I can see why it won a high prize! Good for you... keep it going, V Deepa!

V. Deepa
Date: 8/27/2020 2:29:00 AM

Thankyou for your kind visit,soulful appreciation and encouraging words.:-)Pleased to know that you liked my Muse.:-) Best wishes for all your works too. Take care.Warm regards ~Deepa:-)

Jan Allison

Date: 8/20/2020 10:08:00 AM

beautiful but so sad, many congrats on your win V Deepa:-) hugs Jan xx

V. Deepa
Date: 8/27/2020 2:27:00 AM

Thankyou Jan mam for always stopping by to compliment my work..:-) much love.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 8/19/2020 4:56:00 PM

Heartiest congratulations for your top win in my contest with this brilliant, poignant poem, Deepa:-) Awesome imagery, too!

V. Deepa
Date: 8/27/2020 2:26:00 AM

Thanks a bunch Edward sir for your kind appreciation:-) It's a great honour to be placed at #1 especially in your Contest. Am glad that you liked my work.:-) Take care.Warm regards.

Eve Roper

Date: 8/10/2020 1:03:00 PM

Untold is a very sad poem my friend well said and written, good luck in the contest. You do not have to upload a photo to enter my contest; just put the number of the photo you use at the bottom of the date. So don't let it stop you from writing in any contest because of the photo. The sponsor can not see the photo or comment in the writing tools in you entry when you enter a contest. Eve

V. Deepa
Date: 8/10/2020 1:20:00 PM

Thankyou for the appreciation Eve mam:-) And so kind of you to clarify my doubt and also thanks for encouraging me to write for the contest.Now that I have understood..Surely, I will give it a try.:-)Take care.Much love.~Deepa:-)

Jenish Somadas

Date: 8/10/2020 5:33:00 AM

Untold she croaked, in bleak winter season.. Beautifully penned.. Good luck in the contest Deepa..

V. Deepa
Date: 8/10/2020 5:53:00 AM

Hello Jenish sir, Thankyou for your kind support and appreciation:-) Am pleased to know that you enjoyed my poem.:-) I believe your doing well. Take care.Best wishes:-)