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As sunrise silently marinaded morningtide meadows, our lips flowed like two streams, merging within an exclusive estuary so we set home upon the river bed. At first we floated like butterflies in Babylon, deaf to the squawks of mercenary crows, blind to the creeping weeds, which wandered amongst delicate petals nor did I notice our submerging embankment. As our estuary began to evaporate, you left me stranded in the silt and mud. My heart, once a blossoming garden, evolved into a wasteland of sedges and sludge. Still I wait for soothing streams to return, but all I am left with is marshland of regret and the silence of the butterflies.

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Date: 3/11/2024 3:46:00 AM
Congratulations, SO, for your win. Your poem is just as sweet as the butterflies in Babylon. God bless!
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Date: 3/31/2019 9:53:00 PM
Powerful write!
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Date: 3/31/2019 7:11:00 PM
I offer the sound of one hand clapping! Write in peace my friend!
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Date: 3/26/2019 6:28:00 PM
good thing not silence of the lambs!
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Date: 3/26/2019 6:27:00 PM
this has some really pretty imagery and the emotion is sad and melancholic.Love that!
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Date: 3/26/2019 12:48:00 PM
Beautiful! It definitely goes hand in hand with the accompanying music, and I like the alliteration which is not overdone. Regards // paul
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Date: 3/24/2019 10:00:00 AM
The silence of the butterflies intrigues me, and sets me free in a variety of ways. It sounds like a betrayal to me, however, there is hope and optimism shining through, which makes betrayal so much easier.
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Date: 3/23/2019 8:09:00 AM
Silent, simply beautiful, your words are divine and sublime, I love the music and the image, well done ~
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Date: 3/20/2019 7:20:00 AM
Love the line...at first we floated like butterflies in babylon. Vickie Thayer
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Date: 3/17/2019 3:36:00 PM
Poetic mastery as always Silent...nothing new for me yet...been so busy in real time!...glad I had a minute today though, this is lovely :) Have a great day
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Date: 3/12/2019 6:41:00 AM
I love this poem Si, its a classic. Another one to add to my Fave List....Maria Hugs
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Date: 3/12/2019 3:45:00 AM
Beautifully expressive with imagery to match Silent! ; )
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Date: 3/12/2019 3:30:00 AM
Wow! Deep and touching, SO:)
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Date: 3/11/2019 4:59:00 PM
A Shelly moment whilst reading this poetic gem.
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Date: 3/11/2019 1:36:00 PM
Well done, my friend. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 3/11/2019 11:10:00 AM
A fantastic poem SO - the last three lines tell all! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 3/11/2019 8:45:00 AM
- A wonderful poem, my friend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/11/2019 7:38:00 AM
you never cease to amaze me sweet Silent One. I remember the first poem I read of yours in 2015, my how long ago, huh? You are beautiful and so are your words....thanks for all you share on this site. :)-luloo
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Date: 3/11/2019 2:30:00 AM
Great song and the words. Wonderful and perfect.
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Date: 3/10/2019 11:52:00 PM
Such an evocative piece... amazing work! ;)
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Date: 3/10/2019 11:48:00 PM
What awesome metaphor and I like using the word estuary for poems. This is said in marvellous poetic lovesick silence and longing it is charming n so appealing. Kudos for such great poetry!!! Best wishes,
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Date: 3/10/2019 8:27:00 PM
Silence holds many moments indeed. Strange isn't, how that can be. This is beautiful and tender. ~ Brandy
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Date: 3/10/2019 5:13:00 PM
I am completely blown away by this captivating masterpiece!! As always ... a bow to you brilliant poet :)
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Silent One
Date: 3/10/2019 6:57:00 PM
Thank you Judy..
Date: 3/10/2019 4:18:00 PM
Such a perfect marriage of metaphors for another outstanding poem, Silent! So creatively written! :)
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Silent One
Date: 3/10/2019 6:58:00 PM
Thank you Laura..
Date: 3/10/2019 3:58:00 PM
This is perfectly gorgeous, Silent One, without the music, standing alone. But I like the music you chose, also, and the pictures.
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Silent One
Date: 3/10/2019 7:00:00 PM
Thank you... I like to add music to my poems..
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