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Foreboding of a tempestuous storm, it blackens as it draws near, a cumulonimbus in towering form, extending to the troposphere, So cast off mooring and slacken the line, break free while there's still time, 'cause I'll pull you under if you don't let go, Save yourself and abandon ship, I'll take on water and sink too quick, in gales of winds the swells arise, these waves wills break and so will I, Roars of thunder and screeching wind, sheets of lightning and pelting rains, walls of waves will batter within, until your stability wanes, So cast off mooring and slacken the line, untether your heart from mine, 'cause I'll drown us both if you don't let go, Save yourself and abandon ship, I'm taking on water and sinking quick, in gales of winds the swells arise, these waves are breaking and so am I

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Date: 4/29/2024 7:21:00 PM
A nautical feel and the ship is sinking as a warning is offered, then it suddenly becomes a warning to abandon the relationship as it is sinking too. I love the way the two stories flow into each other, the two warnings become one. Your fine diction reads easily as their is an ebb and flow with the signal of danger then the urgency of forthcoming doom. This is a truly enjoyable poem Shane. best wishes. Wen
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Speaks Volumes
Date: 5/7/2024 1:39:00 AM
I don't take the time ! I MAKE the time because you have never let me down by posting a poem that I did not enjoy.. That's what its all about! MY ENJOYMENT ! Cheers. :)
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Shane Thacker
Date: 4/30/2024 3:27:00 PM
Thank you, Wen. I love that you incorporated ebb and flow into your comment! As always, I appreciate you taking the time to read it.

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