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I knew this day would come When I'd lose you from my sight I won't be able to devour you I'll miss that scrumptious bite Seems everyday you were there for me You were my afternoon delight So rich, nutty, and delicious I should have held you tight I feel so down without you My senses are getting numb You gave me such a pick me up To your pleasure I'd succumb I see you through the window With my sad and longing eyes I crave just one taste of you Can't you hear my heartfelt cries This machine wont take my quarters I've tried again and again I need you, my snickers bar Anyone got change for a ten

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Skat A

Date: 4/30/2015 7:03:00 PM

AWESOME TIM. Congratulations on your well-deserved win. SKAT love

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/25/2015 11:33:00 PM

Hi Tim, Congratulations on your Humorous Poetry contest win :) LINDA

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/22/2015 9:33:00 PM

Congratulations on a great win my friend. Got to have my snickers bar... lol

Kp Nunez

Date: 4/22/2015 1:59:00 PM

LOL! I bet Snickers people paid you to write this poem...:) Congrats!

Eve Roper

Date: 4/21/2015 11:35:00 PM

Tim, I love this humorous write, caffeine attack or chocolate :) a 7 and congratulations on your wonderful win

Doris Jamoner

Date: 10/17/2014 12:36:00 PM

For Love speaks out so quietly In the need to share.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/17/2014 1:22:00 PM

Okay....I'm always sleepy...hugs Tim

Doris Jamoner
Date: 10/17/2014 12:41:00 PM

-____- sorry I wrote the comment above in a wrong place.. I just want and suppose to say Congratz u deserve to win but I wrote something else kinda sleepy hehe! Congratz again!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/16/2014 7:04:00 PM

CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR FIRST PLACE WIN.

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 10/16/2014 9:05:00 AM

Another hit Tim,congrats.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/16/2014 6:00:00 AM

Nice personification, Tim, congrats on the win

Jan Allison

Date: 10/16/2014 4:20:00 AM

oh I remember the banter we had with this one lol many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 10/15/2014 11:53:00 PM

No bad writers in this contest! You were fast, furious, humorous, romantic,lost, found, sought after, wondrous! THANKS FOR ENTERING! I'M HAPPY!

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/15/2014 11:40:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Tim. Number 1. Love it.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 10/12/2014 2:53:00 PM

lmcso so hilarious Tim you have excelled hugs

Tim Smith
Date: 10/12/2014 2:58:00 PM

Thank you my dear. I was in a playful mood.....hugs Tim

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/10/2014 2:14:00 PM

Who can refuse a snicker bar? : ).You put a smile on my face Tim.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/10/2014 2:21:00 PM

lol....Not I....that I admit freely....luckily I walk 2 miles to work from the train each day :) hugs Tim

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/10/2014 12:59:00 PM

Just dropped in to sprinkle rainbow bright happies.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/10/2014 1:12:00 PM

I'll take some....happy Friday :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/10/2014 12:02:00 PM

tasty thoughts tim smiling

Tim Smith
Date: 10/10/2014 12:11:00 PM

Thanks liam...it is a fun piece....cheers

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 10/10/2014 5:55:00 AM

So you went cold turkey without chocolate ah, poor baby Tim. Feel so bad for you my friend that must have been a very horrible experience. Poor you! Poor baby! Want some milk? A cow? What about a baby bottle or pacifier? sorry..... I got no chocolate machine to ship you one...Lol. ;) Hahaha ..lol..lol.. Excellent write! Very funny! You got me grinning a lot here and acting silly too. Love your poem! I give you a 7! Hugs! ;) Love peace and light! xxx D.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/10/2014 6:18:00 AM

That's okay I went to the store after work and bought two :)....hugs Tim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/9/2014 9:15:00 PM

I just knew it was food you were talking about!! Snickers is the name of our new puppy dog!!! So the poem could be about him too. hahaha (he has the coloring of Snickers bar)

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 9:17:00 PM

That is funny and a cute name...hugs to all

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/9/2014 4:07:00 PM

This one made me Snicker, and here you are empty handed, ain't that just the way life be. It so hard to stare at a candy bar and no pocket change. Loved the write and the twist and like everybody else craving chocolate. Maybe the candy bar companies should pay you for this poem.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 4:11:00 PM

At least free candy...I am their best customer :)

Sebastian Aaron Baez

Date: 10/9/2014 12:22:00 PM

LOL. I got two fives, oh wait you need singles. This is funny and awesome, nice work Tim!

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 12:26:00 PM

LOL...thank you my friend....cheers

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/9/2014 11:41:00 AM

- I must admit ...... I love chocolate !!! - Enjoy reading, Tim :)) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 11:57:00 AM

Thanks A-L...I do as well...hugs Tim

Jan Allison

Date: 10/9/2014 9:48:00 AM

If you were closer you could have had one of mine - I've still got 2 Snickers left in the fridge :-) hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/9/2014 7:07:00 PM

Pretentious? Moi?

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 6:47:00 PM

of course we are talking chocolate that's what the poem is about - innuendo moi no way! hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/9/2014 6:40:00 PM

I'm lost are we still talking about chocolate bars. You don't have to be Felini to read in some undercurrent of sexual innuendos once somebody is putting his snicker bar in somebody else lunchbox.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 6:34:00 PM

Oh I thought you would have fun size at least Maurice - they are great for a lunchbox:-) hugs Jan x

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/9/2014 6:29:00 PM

Oh thanks a lot Jan talk about ganging up on the new guy. Mine is bite size and Tim is Kingsize. Besides it's not true, it's just that I just got out of the pool.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 6:19:00 PM

ha ha ha Tim that made me giggle I bet you have a kingsize one:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 6:17:00 PM

Lol...I'm here now....any nibble will do....do you still have bite size Maurice?

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 6:10:00 PM

cos Tim isn't here to defend himself Maurice:-) hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/9/2014 6:07:00 PM

and why are you looking at me Jan when you say LITTLE nibble.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 5:50:00 PM

Sometimes I just fancy a little nibble Maurice:-) Jan x

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/9/2014 8:54:00 AM

MMMM. I want some chocolate now, I'm surprised they haven't made vending machines that take credit cards. This made me smile this morning sweetie, the humor is needed on a chilly october morning, :)

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/9/2014 6:34:00 PM

Where are you Cas? I'm getting killed just above you. Tim and Jan are ganging up on me. They're making fun of the size of my Snicker Bar.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 9:47:00 AM

Pah Mr Smith - behave - U need U in humour! hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 9:18:00 AM

btw...you spelled humor right...not that fancy way Jan does :)

Tim Smith
Date: 10/9/2014 8:57:00 AM

lol...I'm heading to the store to get some :) hugs Tim