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Black-eyed Susan

Black-eyed Susan, a Summer doll. Bright, yellow, with downturned petals. My childhood shadow skips along the trail with honeysuckle scent. Flow’rs stunning in a garden fete. Her sunrays smile in a vast field. Petals dance in a circle ‘round Susan’s sun-soaked, ebony eye.

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/21/2024 10:49:00 AM

We have a whole bush of Black Eyed Susans and they re so dainty, so fresh, so beautiful with an intoxicating aroma. You so rightly won this contest, Congratulations my friend. Hugs an blessings, Jennifer.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/21/2024 12:01:00 PM

Thank you, Jennifer! Hugs ~ Kim

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 5/20/2024 11:33:00 AM

This one is sweet in its simplicity Kim. Last time my lawn was mowed, the mower left the patches of susans and paintbrush, and even one single paintbrush. LOL I guess everyone loves a soft of beauty.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/20/2024 4:04:00 PM

Thank you, Linda! We do love a touch of beauty.

Valsa George

Date: 5/17/2024 12:08:00 AM

I have seen this flower and we have them in plenty in our place. But I didn't know that they are named 'Black eyed Susan'. How you have associated your childhood with these flowers and honey suckles! Congratulations Kim on your win.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/20/2024 4:04:00 PM

Thank you, Valsa! Truly I remember the lvely scent of honeysuckles. Glad you learned the lovely name of this gorgeous flower.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/16/2024 10:30:00 AM

Back with Congratulation on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely "Black-eyed Susan" write again. Have A Blessed Day Writing Away............

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/20/2024 4:05:00 PM

Thank you, Paula!

Jay Narain

Date: 5/16/2024 9:41:00 AM

Thanks for listing your nice poem in my sponsored contest. Congratulations.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/20/2024 4:05:00 PM

A nice contest to be part of. Thanks, Jay!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/15/2024 8:41:00 PM

Just love the way you've wrapped this one up in that final line, Kim. ~ A Boy Named Sue

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/16/2024 6:00:00 AM

Thank you! :)

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/15/2024 5:47:00 AM

Dear Kim, what a delightful celebration of summer's vibrant beauty. The bright yellow petals and the ebony eye transport me to a sun-drenched field, where childhood memories dance alongside the honeysuckle scent. Kim, your poetic voice captures the essence of nature's radiance, inviting us to bask in the warmth and joy of this seasonal splendor. It is a delightful and evocative piece that radiates pure joy. - Blessings, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/15/2024 6:36:00 PM

Your lovely comments and kindness always make my day. Thank you, Daniel!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/14/2024 8:25:00 PM

This is a pretty poem of a pretty flower. The black-eyed Susan stands out amongst the other flowers. The reference to childhood adds to the charm. First experience molds the eye to beauty.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/15/2024 5:33:00 AM

Yes, it does! It is a pretty flower with an expressive name! Thank you, Hilda!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/14/2024 4:35:00 PM

Black-Eyed Susans are one of my favorite summer flowers. You described them so eloquently and perfect. The last two lines are my favorites: Petals dance in a circle ‘round Susan’s sun-soaked, ebony eye. "Ebony eye" was brilliant and creative. Enjoy your evening, hugs, Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2024 4:47:00 PM

Thank you, Sara! They are so inviting! :)

Paige Hind

Date: 5/14/2024 12:52:00 PM

It seems there is light in the dark- beautiful images

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2024 1:01:00 PM

Thank you, Paige!

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/14/2024 12:06:00 PM

The Black-eyed Susan flower is the focal point of this magnificent poetry that celebrates the life and splendor of nature. Great mental image of the blossom and recollections linked to it.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2024 1:01:00 PM

Thank you! It is one that I remember vividly! :)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 5/14/2024 11:29:00 AM

Hello Kim Rodrigues, These are beautiful flowers for a garden. Hugs. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 5/17/2024 4:19:00 PM

Hello Kim., Black Eyed Susan's are beautiful flowers. i love purple flowers, red, and yellow and pink. Enjkoy your weekend. Hugs. /Darlene/

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2024 11:55:00 AM

I loves them since childhood! No longer I fell in love with purple coneflowers later, and its accompanying red-winged blackbird. Hugs, Darlene!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/14/2024 11:21:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your lovely "Black-eyed Susan" write. It is a pretty flower. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have A Blessed Day Writing Away.........

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2024 11:56:00 AM

Thank you, Paula!