The Haunting

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Written, May 20, 2024
For the contest, Ottava Rima
Sponsor, Emile Pinet

"Deep silence lay heavy in the walls, floors, and even the bricks as I stood still listening ... knowing that death still lingered here." Quote by _ Poet Abandoned house are just meant for exploring, I am way too curious to walk on by; and don't mind the creaking, slopping old flooring, but while inspecting this house it seemed to sigh. I could hear rain pouring and the wind roaring, and from somewhere deep pigeons began to fly; then I saw her float all wispy down the stairs, and I ran so fast I knocked over old chairs.

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/20/2024 5:40:00 PM

Another fabulous poem and contest entry! I liked your original quote at the beginning. The poem had a haunting quality to it and was totally engaging. Reading it reminded me of a scene I created in the novel I wrote; the protagonist had an affinity for old, abandoned farmhouses. Her explorations are the triggers for discovering family secrets. Okay, I rambled. Sorry 'bout that. Best wishes with the contest & enjoy your evening, hugs, Sara

Constance La France
Date: 5/23/2024 1:46:00 PM

Sara, thank you for the compliment on my poem and quote, lol, I like your rambling, and thanks for your comment and encouragement, hugs

Christina Bowring

Date: 5/20/2024 1:51:00 PM

Dear Constance …. Spooky! Love your quote as well as the poem - really eerie with great impact. I love your haunting poems. This is very atmospheric building up the tension. Your vivid descriptions make it easy for the reader to picture the scene of the haunted house - curiosity that suddenly turns to horror - I would have been out of there like a shot too! ‘ ‘this house it seemed to sigh’ really stood our for me. The secrets held within its walls. Really enjoyed this haunting tale.

Constance La France
Date: 5/23/2024 1:47:00 PM

Christina, thank you for the nice comment and compliment, yeah, I got a bit spooky for this one, and thanks for the encouragement, hugs

Christina Bowring
Date: 5/20/2024 1:52:00 PM

Good luck in the contest. I loved and appreciated it. Hugs and blessings xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2024 1:46:00 PM

The end made me laugh! Seems to put the protgonist at ease, discovering a curious house not unlike a poet, until things GET REAL! Enjoyed!

Constance La France
Date: 5/23/2024 1:48:00 PM

Kim, lol, not so brave in the end, thanks for the compliment, hugs