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10/11/2022 3:43:05 PM
Bob Atkinson Posts: 295
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Sharpness of Her Pen -by - Bob Atkinson
she stood upon that center stage to act as if she had an openness of direction through sharpness of her pen
she told of laments abundant tales of woe held near her chest an oscillated aberration lost in such soft duress
tried to absorb her meaning face covered by my hands alternated sobs and laughter a simple mortal man
she ended with a diatribe on how he left her moods buoyed by freedom's percolation which let her find her tools
to build a character of love when lover left the nest seeking a fully formed pretense which sauntered to the audience
I loved here every moment although couldn't tell you why just felt as if emotion had hit me in the eye
my character I questioned because she knew so well needs of the initiated past things I'll never tell
the end came quite abruptly lights faltered and went out causing a gasp from audience then from them many claps
tell you when I'm sober thing I did right then in reaction to her motions and the sharpness of her pen
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5/26/2023 3:48:32 PM
Bob Atkinson Posts: 295
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Somewhat difficult to add emotions to writing.
But, the more you do it, the more you're aware of the need.
"Poetry, the emotional content of literature"
"Prose, the factual, or pseudo-factual content of literature"
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6/12/2023 12:50:16 PM
Toll Bell Posts: 1
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Hello
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