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12/9/2011 11:01:13 AM
adael irizarry Posts: 1
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Deep thoughts cloud my mind engraving sad images into my cerebrum they now spread through my body like wildfire leaving me paralyzed and helpless cannot move, these emotional chains have tied me down escape is imminent, I'm just trapped in my body I try to scream but I'm the only one hearing it suddenly I get that push to set me free free from the sorrow that binds me the ducts opening, letting out tears of heartache, pain and forlorn relieved of this sadness that has kept me confined it is okay to cry
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12/10/2011 4:56:46 AM
David Rombo Posts: 1
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Deep and solid, however i would suggest a more involving approach especially in the middle.but all in all its an amazing piece of brilliance.
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