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1/8/2021 12:31:48 AM

mike porter
Posts: 10

The heavens open up and the lord's spirit.
came down from heaven
riding on clouds of lightning bolts
That filled the church.
with tails of shooting stars and streaks of comets
He then commanded the rings of Saturn.
to anoint the icons with brightly shining halos
He then commanded the flames from the sun.
to light the holy candles
And he commanded the rocks from the holy land.
to pile up one upon the other and placed the altar upon it
and blessed everyone from that place.
edited by jargenlink on 1/8/2021

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