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11/3/2019 11:38:21 PM
Michelo Mweetwa Posts: 4
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Look into my eyes
Look into my eyes
See the humanity inside
See where beauty resides See them blue, green or brown
See them smile or frown
Look into my eyes
In my eyes the lies can’t hide
The tears glitter before they slide
My eyes are narrowed to recognize
My eyes widen when terrified
Look into my eyes
Even though I lost my sight
My eyes show the imagination in my mind
I might be staring into nothingness
But my eyes see a million images
Look into my eyes
See your reflection on the pupil
See yourself from my point of view
See me blink away your doubts
See me beam a gaze of trust
Look into my eyes
They will shrunken your world view
Give you a human mirror image
They will beam an immediate truth
An intimate feedback about you edited by Michelo on 11/3/2019
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11/27/2019 1:43:44 AM
Lizvet Ta Posts: 1
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I really like this one. I always like visuals. This would make a good poem for an artist to illustrate, or maybe some digital art could fit it. It also has rhythm. I like the immediacy of it and that it asks the reader to participate. Only the word shrunken here might be better as shrink.
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