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9/15/2013 10:41:23 AM
Teresa Lindsay Posts: 16
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The outside world changes thru the seasons As we go thru the seasons of life ourselves Spring is the time of birth and rebirth To begin again new, fresh in life, always sweet To grow as the season grows and changes Summer is for the fun in life, our youth To be young and care free, no worries To be nourished with love and the elements Fall a time of maturity and settling down Full of knowledge, wisdom and hope Living in contentment and harmony in life Winter a time of aging and preparing For the final journey in life, to give way For the new spring of birth and rebirth.
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9/15/2013 12:06:52 PM
Just That Archaic Poet Posts: 89
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The only problem I have with this piece (and call me pedant), is that you spelled "through" as "thru"; that choice in spelling brings down the quality of an overall good poem, I think. Other than that, I enjoyed your piece; kudos
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